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Alive by day, Dead by night
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Alive by day, Dead by night |
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branden726 
since 2000-09-25
Posts 607Bay City, MI 
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Alive by day, Dead by night This how I live my life, Go to school and be afraid, Someone might go on a rampage, The last I know im running down the hall, BANG BANG!! I fall to the floor, Alive by day but I was Dead by nigh. Just a short piece ya know with all the violence going around. |
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Kicking Kim Member
since 2001-04-16
Posts 426Cloud Cucko Land! |
This is a brilliant poem I really enjoyed it! I like the concept and also the language makes it a brilliant read. Interesting, intriguing and inspiring! ^*~Kicking Kim~*^ "Theres no posession, just obsession and growing depression" |
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anonymous albert ?
since 2001-03-23
Posts 2979 |
great job. i liked it.. like how u discribed the situation of what u were trying to say.. the "BANG,BANG" got me anyways... keep writing   ...?death is not the greatest loss in life. the greatest loss is what dies inside us while we live. -norman cousins [This message has been edited by anonymous albert ? (edited 04-21-2001).] |
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Linc
since 2001-03-07
Posts 552The Backstreet Boy |
Hey, FULL of emotion I loved it until your next -- Linc "Once you reach your original goal it seems that the journey was your real accomplishment." |
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Angel Bee Member
since 2001-01-30
Posts 176Virginia |
This is very meaningful. It was good. It gives us a good bit of reality. Thanks for the read. keep writing, ab *~Sometimes just holding hands is holding on to everything.~* |
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Dopey Dope
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Member Patricius
since 2000-08-30
Posts 11132San Juan, Puerto Rico |
I enjoyed this. it had some good thoughts.  I was born myself, raised myself, and will continue to be myself. The world will just have to adjust. |
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Allan Riverwood
since 2001-01-04
Posts 3502Winnipeg |
Scary, isn't it? Good job on the poem. ~Allan Build a man a fire, and he's warm for a day. Set a man on fire, and he'll be warm for the rest of his life. |
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branden726
since 2000-09-25
Posts 607Bay City, MI |
Hey thanks for all the replies  i really just thought of this ya know and it really scares me to go to school knowing theres gonna be a fight or what not who knows what could happen :/*Tears of love* |
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Lakewalker Member Elite
since 2000-08-05
Posts 3289On the streets w/ people |
Hey, sorry I ahven't been replying to all of your new stuff, I've just been out of it lately. This poem is done well, nice job on it "Be kind for everyone you meet is fighting a harder battle" Plato. |
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Fading Away
since 2001-03-14
Posts 3131Lynchburg, Virginia |
Good poem, Branden. Unfortunately, this is something that's a terrifying reality.. Thanks for sharing. --Marie subconsciously, i think i can eat so much to make my stomach hurt, instead of my heart. |
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branden726
since 2000-09-25
Posts 607Bay City, MI |
Well thanks for the replies once again i didnt know i'd get so many replies from such a short piece and its okay lakewalker ive just been posting i havent got much repling in lately and im sorry for that all......ill try. *Tears of love* |
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Acies
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Member Rara Avis
since 2000-06-07
Posts 7665Twilight Zone |
Great way to express your opinions on this subject matter Branden. You did really good on this one. Hope poems like this would open one's eyes after reading "So long as men can breathe or eyes can see, |
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