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Heart=Life Junior Member
since 2001-02-03
Posts 29United Kingdom |
I wonder how many of you have ever told someone you love them and not meant it but said only to reply to those words yourself or just felt a sudden rush of emotion that you percieve as Love but actually mis-read it. I wonder how many of you would admit you have, or do you consider yourself to be "perfect" and would never make such a mistake. Well think again....... ---------------------------------------------------- Wake up to the sun Shining brightly in the dawning After hearing the birds songs Whistling sweetly in the morning. Last few days have caused me pain Made me suffer, drove me insane At least I rose to the sun And not the rain, yet again My selfishness in Love Weighed me down with heartache But taught me a lesson To not percieve Love as fake. I recently met this girl That I have needed for so long Who will lift the weight off my heart And correct all I have done wrong. I snook off from my house Met up with her at midnight Cuddled and danced with her In the guidance of the moonlight. I fell in Love with her that night With the stars shining bright At least i didn't cheat Love As now I rise to the sunlight. Nobody is perfect When Love is Concerned You have to really mean it Or else what have we learned!!! |
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Dopey Dope
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Member Patricius
since 2000-08-30
Posts 11132San Juan, Puerto Rico |
I agree with you........What would have we learned if we just lied about something so powerful? Anyway, we'd only be cheating ourselves and our partner.... I thought the poem was great, and I do admit I've done it....I suck  I was born myself, raised myself, and will continue to be myself. The world will just have to adjust. |
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Heart=Life Junior Member
since 2001-02-03
Posts 29United Kingdom |
To admit the truth does not suck, women like the truth more than faking it!!!! Well Done |
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Marshalzu 
since 2001-02-15
Posts 2681Lurking |
I admit to telling someone that i've loved them I well I haven't really loved them just loved the idea of being on love... anyway I really liked the post and it's good to see someone else from the U.K. of G.B. & N.I. Anyway keep on posting. Andrew. " No Army can conquer a galaxy, yet faith alone can overturn the universe." |
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silvrduck Member
since 2000-11-05
Posts 146 |
*raises hand* I've done it. Told myself i never would, and then i did!  not good..Anyways, I really like this poem. The lesson is real.. that's nice.  Keep it up! Sarah *The hardest thing to do is watch the one you love, love somebody else.* |
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banburycross Senior Member
since 2001-03-27
Posts 946viginia |
You bring up a point that is very important for people to understand. i likes the poem and the structure was good. keep posting. Sometimes, the things that go unsaid are the only things worth hearing. |
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Heart=Life Junior Member
since 2001-02-03
Posts 29United Kingdom |
Thanks for all being understanding about the point i'm trying to make, alot of people do it and never learn!!! |
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Lakewalker Member Elite
since 2000-08-05
Posts 3289On the streets w/ people |
Hey, good poem and good point! "Be kind, for everyone you meet is fighting a hard battle" |
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Empty tears Member
since 2001-03-12
Posts 64 |
Yep, i did it once, had it done to me, then called the person i did it too and apologised. Powerful poem. made me think: not an easy task :~). Great work. ~Brittany~ |
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cherish Senior Member
since 2001-03-25
Posts 1639swimming in fairy floss........... |
hahaha..i know the feeling of doing it...gr...you know when you'rein love and you know when you just really really really like a person...but then the english language doesnt have enough words to describe half of our emotions... "Life is not long and boring, |
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AngelShell Member
since 2000-03-01
Posts 446not heaven nor hell so... |
Well, I don't think I've ever said it when I didn't truely felt it on purpose if that makes any sense... I've said it because he's said it and I 'thought' I was in love - does that count? I've also said it because I thought it would fix everything and I've also said it because there was nothing else to say, we'd come to the end and I thought that saying would make everything new. As I am currently single, it didn't work. I liked the poem though, very real. As the song goes "Saying I love you is not the words I want to hear from you, it's not that I don't want you, not to say it but if you only knew, how easy, it would be to show me how you feel, more than words, is all you heave to do to make it real, then you wouldn't have to say, that you love me, 'cause I'd already know, what would you say if I took those away, then you couldn't make things new, just by saying I love you." |
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Heart=Life Junior Member
since 2001-02-03
Posts 29United Kingdom |
All the ones you said angelshell count but at least you ADMIT it, well done. And the saying you mentioned as Westlife once sang!! |
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AngelShell Member
since 2000-03-01
Posts 446not heaven nor hell so... |
yeah, Westlife rock. |
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Linc
since 2001-03-07
Posts 552The Backstreet Boy |
Hey, Good point, great poem enough said Until your next poem-- Linc "Once you reach your original goal it seems that the journey was your real accomplishment." |
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Allan Riverwood
since 2001-01-04
Posts 3502Winnipeg |
Hmm... I'll admit I've done it, but not in a long time. But I will say that it's possible to fall both in and out of love, isn't it? When we say "I love you" to someone and it is real, and then everything turns out wrong and it ends, can it be considered an act of cowardice to deny that it ever really was love? To say "oh, it wasn't really love" just because it is now over? I think that it is important to be able to say that we have lied about this kind of thing, but under the right circumstances. It shouldn't be used as a form of pride conservation. Oh, and I liked the poem.  ~Allan The sun was born, so it shall die. ~VNV Nation, "Further" |
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Acies
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Member Rara Avis
since 2000-06-07
Posts 7665Twilight Zone |
Lovely poem. And I totally agree with you. thanks for sharing and keep it up. loved the poem "So long as men can breathe or eyes can see, |
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