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Him & Her. |
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Hallucination Member
since 2001-03-18
Posts 419 |
She puts on her prettiest dress lights the candles opens a bottle of vine Just want to make it special for their Valentine But he’s not coming home, she sits in the dark and waits alone At the romantic picnic in their living room He tries to call her but his batteries are low And she drops out at hallo. He hurries home but she’s gone Left a note at the kitchen table “ Goodbye , I can’t live like this, I’m not that strong my heart not unbreakable. Call this number when you have grown, if you think you’re able, To build a serious relationship “. Time goes on Christmas comes closer the snow begins to fall Soon he’s desperate always thinking about if he should call There is to much pain, the loneliness is driving him insane While listening to her voice on the answering machine Her heart begins to hurt didn’t think she needed his touch Didn’t think she missed him so much. She hurries down to the phone Picks it up and starts to dial She hears him breathe As his voice answers “ hallo “ ( Her ) “ I’m sorry, I left you behind, need you to hold me in your arms again. Can you ever forgive me please, I know we can win And stay like this forever “. ( Him ) “ Me to, I’ll take you back, just come home it felt like a lifetime. I’ll forgive everything you did, yes, we can win From now on till eternity “. |
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anonymous albert ?
since 2001-03-23
Posts 2979 |
nice job... interestin format.. i liked it keep writing   ...?death is not the greatest loss in life. the greatest loss is what dies inside us while we live. -norman cousins |
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Member Seraphic
since 2000-01-18
Posts 22676with you |
( he should have apologised too ) LOL  this is great SEA |
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Dopey Dope
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Member Patricius
since 2000-08-30
Posts 11132San Juan, Puerto Rico |
the format rocked. I really liked this poem!! VERY good job on it.  I was born myself, raised myself, and will continue to be myself. The world will just have to adjust. |
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Fading Away
since 2001-03-14
Posts 3131Lynchburg, Virginia |
Very interesting.. I REALLY enjoyed this. Nice format! Good work! --Marie subconsciously, i think i can eat so much to make my stomach hurt, instead of my heart. |
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