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Is There Any Love in Your Heart
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Is There Any Love in Your Heart |
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MoeRocko Member
since 2001-04-25
Posts 166West Virginia |
Tell me baby why can't you see That I'm feeling down If you open your eyes you'd see That I'm wearing a frown You'd think about yourself If you thought i was dead Baby you walk around like you own this town Your whole life is a fantasy and I'm playing the clown You talk behind my back and spens up all my bread Is there any love in your heart? Babe you say I'm the only one but you're screwing all my friends All that you care about is Gucci and Mercedes Benz You're just the girl thats up on all the latest trends Is There Any Love in Your Heart |
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anonymous albert ?
since 2001-03-23
Posts 2979 |
yea...lots of gurls these days be judgin on that but if she only cares bout that instead of u her heart is not for u..u'll find a gurl that loves u for ur heart so..yea good luck on whatever situations   ...?death is not the greatest loss in life. the greatest loss is what dies inside us while we live. -norman cousins |
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LoveBug
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since 2000-01-08
Posts 4697 |
OOOh... tough situation here. You write about it very well, but it really sucks that you have to put up with this. I hope things get better. Thanks for sharing.  "Men judge generally more by the eye than by the hand, for everyone can see and few can feel."-Machiavelli |
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Dopey Dope
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Member Patricius
since 2000-08-30
Posts 11132San Juan, Puerto Rico |
Hey i read it and it sounded like one of those rockin' blues songs. I really enjoyed this.  I was born myself, raised myself, and will continue to be myself. The world will just have to adjust. |
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Allan Riverwood
since 2001-01-04
Posts 3502Winnipeg |
I think it sounds so much like a song because the word "baby" is used so frequently. Other than that, it does sort of have a bluesy feeling to it.  Nice one. ~Allan Build a man a fire, and he's warm for a day. Set a man on fire, and he'll be warm for the rest of his life. |
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Godsend_1 Member
since 2001-04-19
Posts 247great state of illinois |
whoa ewok you dork why didnt you tell me you had talent i relly like this poem its true some girls are just like that ya know my sister is one of them *satan* thanx for the great read man cathc ya later ben redshaw the great and now thinking about hurting satan i am what i am and that is all that i am and all that i shall ever be......so deal with it |
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Fading Away
since 2001-03-14
Posts 3131Lynchburg, Virginia |
This is really good.. I could actually put a tune to this! It would make a good song. Nice work, enjoyed! --Marie subconsciously, i think i can eat so much to make my stomach hurt, instead of my heart. |
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SEA
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Member Seraphic
since 2000-01-18
Posts 22676with you |
yes, this reads very much like a song..... |
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Marshalzu
since 2001-02-15
Posts 2681Lurking |
This is really good, well done. Keep up the good work and I look forward to more of your work. Zu " The tree of liberty must be refreshed from time to time with the blood of patriots" -Thomas jefferson |
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Linc
since 2001-03-07
Posts 552The Backstreet Boy |
Hey, Aww thats so sad...I hope you find someone who loves you for you and who's not a slut (can I say that??? if I can't sorry Great poem anyhow until your next poem-- Linc "Once you reach your original goal it seems that the journey was your real accomplishment." |
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knightlyshadows Senior Member
since 2001-04-14
Posts 791obscured vision |
awwwwwws ewokster  thats so sayadish!if this be a song u best be singin it to me tonite hunnAy:P lol i loves you muchs *waves a sox in the air*  tiff  “A single choice can build destinies,or destroy them.” |
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lonely*soul Member
since 2001-04-05
Posts 396east haddam (moodus) ct :) |
ok gotta admitt...SOME girls are like this...but not me im an angel 0 but for real..i liked this...its sooo true...i thought this was bout a guy up until the last stanza..ne ways good job!!*KiM* "i once asked my daddy, daddy, are we going to the moon, and he said, we cant get to the moon from where we are" ~ME (hehe this actully happened to me |
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Lakewalker Member Elite
since 2000-08-05
Posts 3289On the streets w/ people |
I was gonna say something about it feeling like a song and I wanted to be original, but the other 40 billion people already mentioned it Oh well Good job on this, I hope to see more for you!"Be kind for everyone you meet is fighting a harder battle" Plato. |
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