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A daydream
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A daydream |
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Spine Grinder Senior Member
since 2000-10-28
Posts 1127Standing In Silence... |
A lay here thinking about you, I begin to daydream. I dream about your deep brown eyes, You appeared in my thoughts in a cloud of steam. You stepped out of the cloud, like a heavenly angel would. If only I could tell you how I feel, I wish that at least I could. But as you stand there smiling, I can't help but wonder, Do you really love me? Or do just put up with the constant chatter? Or maybe our love may one day actually be?........... [This message has been edited by Spine Grinder (edited 04-25-2001).] |
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anonymous albert ?
since 2001-03-23
Posts 2979 |
i liked this staci.. nicely done.. keep writing   ...?death is not the greatest loss in life. the greatest loss is what dies inside us while we live. -norman cousins |
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Dopey Dope
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Member Patricius
since 2000-08-30
Posts 11132San Juan, Puerto Rico |
I liked this poem....not my fav by you, but nonetheless a good poem. I enjoyed it.  I was born myself, raised myself, and will continue to be myself. The world will just have to adjust. |
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LoveBug
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Member Elite
since 2000-01-08
Posts 4697 |
This sounds like a really confusing situation you are in how. You describe it well, and I just hope that sharing this helped you out some. I hope things get better for you. Thanks for sharing.  "Men judge generally more by the eye than by the hand, for everyone can see and few can feel."-Machiavelli |
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Allan Riverwood
since 2001-01-04
Posts 3502Winnipeg |
Tough spot to be in, I can relate. Sometimes we feel we aren't quite enough to be loved (or whatever we may feel) and that the person is just putting up with us for some reason. It's not a happy thought, but it does pass.  Best of luck. ~Allan Build a man a fire, and he's warm for a day. Set a man on fire, and he'll be warm for the rest of his life. |
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Fading Away
since 2001-03-14
Posts 3131Lynchburg, Virginia |
Aww, this is a very nicely written poem. I really enjoyed the read.. I hope things get better for you, though. Hang in there.  --Marie subconsciously, i think i can eat so much to make my stomach hurt, instead of my heart. |
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vixengrl04 Member
since 2001-04-26
Posts 495East Haddam, CT |
This is cute. Good luck. ~*Nikki*~ ~*Of all the millions of people in the world, I'm just me.*~ |
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Acies
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Member Rara Avis
since 2000-06-07
Posts 7665Twilight Zone |
WOW!!! ~*applauds*~ I am amazed by your ability to write, and I love most specially the last lines. That is what romance is made out of. "So long as men can breathe or eyes can see, |
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lonely*soul Member
since 2001-04-05
Posts 396east haddam (moodus) ct :) |
i like this one...good job ~good read *KiM* "i once asked my daddy, daddy, are we going to the moon, and he said, we cant get to the moon from where we are" ~ME (hehe this actully happened to me |
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