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Suga_Baby
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since 2000-08-06

Posts 380
Maine, USA

0 posted 2001-04-22 08:11 PM

Hey everyone! W

W it has been so long... I haven't posted in here for 3 months! Not that I haven't been writing, I just have had so much going on... Well, I am glad to be back! Sorry if my recent work stinks, but oh well!

Over and over and over I cry,
Left in the dark and wondering why...
Why his feelings he did not show,
His logic in this I do not know.

Over and over and over I tried,
True to the end, I never lied.
The effort I gave nearly broke me
And maybe one day he’ll clearly see.

Over and Over and over I wonder--
How could he leave me? I sit and ponder.
It wasn’t working, although it could.
I did for him what no others would.

Over and over and over I cry...
I dry the tears and look to the sky.
When will I find a bond that lasts?
I’ve plenty of time, but time, like the sky, is vast.

"A dream is a wish your heart makes while you are fast asleep."

sleepymoongirl
Member

since 2001-04-19

Posts 157
bc canada

1 posted 2001-04-22 09:53 PM

maybe it is cuz sometimes we do not alwayz see what we have..only know it is gone after the fact. liked the poem

as u go in life there will be ur hardships it is up to u if it makes u or breaks u.

Acies

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Member Rara Avis

since 2000-06-07

Posts 7665
Twilight Zone

2 posted 2001-04-22 09:56 PM

Oh Sara, if I can only change things for you. You really liked this guy didn't you? The poem shows that pretty much. I guess if things aren't meant to be, they aren't meant to be. Very lovely poem my friend. Keep you head up and keep sharing more. thanks for the beautiful read

"So long as men can breathe or eyes can see,
So long lives this, and this give life to thee." W.S.

Allan Riverwood

Member Elite

since 2001-01-04

Posts 3502
Winnipeg

3 posted 2001-04-23 01:12 AM

Hey there.

Welcome back to PIP.
I really enjoyed this poem a great deal, the repititions you used were so well-placed. Keeping in mind that this is one of your works that "suck," you've sparked my interest.

I've my eye on you.
~Allan

Build a man a fire, and he's warm for a day. Set a man on fire, and he'll be warm for the rest of his life.
~Unknown

Bishop
Junior Member

since 2001-04-22

Posts 30
Nottingham, England

4 posted 2001-04-23 02:20 AM

Cool. I enjoyed reading this!

^*Bishop*^

*Evil has many faces, and I'm one of them*

silvrduck
Member

since 2000-11-05

Posts 146

5 posted 2001-04-23 08:06 AM

what a sad subject.. I'm sorry. this was still a wonderful poem though, the repitition was great

Take care, and keep posting!

*The hardest thing to do is watch the one you love, love somebody else.*

Fading Away

Member Elite

since 2001-03-14

Posts 3131
Lynchburg, Virginia

6 posted 2001-04-23 02:50 PM

Wonderful poem. Very nice job with the repitition. Like Allan said, it's well placed. If you really think this one sucks, then I can't wait to read a good one!
Nicely done. I enjoyed this one a lot!

--Marie

subconsciously, i think i can eat so much to make my stomach hurt, instead of my heart.

MindlessPoet
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since 2001-04-20

Posts 106
Texas

7 posted 2001-04-23 03:15 PM

I agree with the others... very nice for such a "sucky" poem. Keep 'em comin!

*TiMMYBoY*
Yeah, that's me. The Weird One.

Dopey Dope

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Member Patricius

since 2000-08-30

Posts 11132
San Juan, Puerto Rico

8 posted 2001-04-24 03:41 PM

Hey i liked the poem.....funny how i saw you post love poems up and all of a sudden wham with the being left poems......sucks....not the poem, the situation!
Hope all gets well.

I was born myself, raised myself, and will continue to be myself. The world will just have to adjust.

I'm in love with my shadow
I admire it daily

Suga_Baby
Member

since 2000-08-06

Posts 380
Maine, USA

9 posted 2001-04-24 03:51 PM

Well, Dopey, that's because I got dumped... it was 2 months ago *LOL* I just FINALLY felt like posting all my poems about it... I get over him more and more each day, but he was a great guy whom I don't think I will ever forget... I wish we were still together sometimes and other times I feel that it won't work... oh well, that's life I guess, and I'd better get used to it! Grrrr...

[This message has been edited by Suga_Baby (edited 04-24-2001).]

Acies

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Member Rara Avis

since 2000-06-07

Posts 7665
Twilight Zone

10 posted 2001-04-24 08:35 PM

Well, I'd like to see the others you are talking about

"So long as men can breathe or eyes can see,
So long lives this, and this give life to thee." W.S.

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