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A heart slowly breaking
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A heart slowly breaking |
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Sabriel.s.h.lover Member
since 2001-04-16
Posts 73b.f.e. aka- Hickville |
A heart slowly breaknig, is only her's. It increases every time, he pushes her down. It breaks even more, when he smacks her around. A heart slowly breaking, is only her's. It increases every time, he swears and he shouts. It breaks even more, when he punches and he beats. A heart slowly broke, when she's lying in her grave............ [This message has been edited by Sabriel.s.h.lover (edited 04-23-2001).] |
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Sabriel.s.h.lover Member
since 2001-04-16
Posts 73b.f.e. aka- Hickville |
Sorry that's supposed to be smacks* ~Sabriel |
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Member Rara Avis
since 2000-06-07
Posts 7665Twilight Zone |
I've noticed that you write using a third person always. It does seem pretty obvious that your are this person though. If he does those thing, leave him. I'm sorry but I don't believe in hitting a girl. It makes me furious to hear about someone doing so. I hope things get better for you soon. I mean soon  thanks for sharing"So long as men can breathe or eyes can see, |
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sleepymoongirl Member
since 2001-04-19
Posts 157bc canada |
wow that poem is cool. like not the person being beaten around but what u wrote and like as u go through her heart breaking and how when tis all over she dies hmm will have to add this to my libary link   as u go in life there will be ur hardships it is up to u if it makes u or breaks u. |
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silvrduck Member
since 2000-11-05
Posts 146 |
This is a really good poem. I hope it is not about you though..  If it is, please talk to someone who can help. No one should have to suffer from abuse.. good poem though. *The hardest thing to do is watch the one you love, love somebody else.* |
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orange()alligator Junior Member
since 2001-02-06
Posts 21 |
hey i liked that, brought back some weird memories but i still liked it. good job on this one, n it's okay if u spelt smacks wrong lol. -bergundy- |
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Allan Riverwood
since 2001-01-04
Posts 3502Winnipeg |
Hey look everyone, it's Bergundy. Maybe POA will follow her here soon?There's a way to edit your poetry, this icon here -->  Hit it on your post. It will allow you to edit. Nice job on the poem, I hope this isn't about you and if it is, then do get some help please. ~Allan Build a man a fire, and he's warm for a day. Set a man on fire, and he'll be warm for the rest of his life. |
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Bishop Junior Member
since 2001-04-22
Posts 30Nottingham, England |
I loved this poem. If this is about you then leave him NOW! ^*Bishop*^ |
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Fading Away
since 2001-03-14
Posts 3131Lynchburg, Virginia |
I like this a lot! Nice job. --Marie subconsciously, i think i can eat so much to make my stomach hurt, instead of my heart. |
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Sabriel.s.h.lover Member
since 2001-04-16
Posts 73b.f.e. aka- Hickville |
Believe me, this is sooooo not me. If it was i would have left him by now. And even if it was, I'd be dead and i wouldn't have been here to write this! ~Sabriel |
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Spine Grinder Senior Member
since 2000-10-28
Posts 1127Standing In Silence... |
She's got a point there, how on earth would she have been here to write that if she was already dead?well she could be a ghost...Just kidding!  nice job [This message has been edited by Spine Grinder (edited 04-23-2001).] |
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Dopey Dope
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Member Patricius
since 2000-08-30
Posts 11132San Juan, Puerto Rico |
I enjoyed this....very sad poem. Hope you're ok.  I was born myself, raised myself, and will continue to be myself. The world will just have to adjust. |
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AngelPoet87 Member
since 2001-04-21
Posts 280Indy |
really good poem, even better to hear that its not about you, tho i'm sure it does apply to many people, way too many people, but still a good piece of writing. ~ali 2Good |
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