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Kosetsu
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since 2001-03-10

Posts 450
Alabama, USA

0 posted 2001-04-22 05:07 PM

Elves run loose and free,
And I see a small faerie,
There’s a man with monkey-tail,
That’s as swift as the wind’s sharp gale.

Blood stains the sands,
And chaos holds the lands,
Knights and ladies rule,
And men are like the mule.

Surely we hate this
Place of discordial bliss,
A place that war slowly sours.
But no. This Land is Ours.

Power tugs us, pulls us towards
Abyssal tortures and rewards
Men live underneath the earth,
But in the stars, life gives birth.

I have seen it all,
Tiny gnomes and giants tall,
Wolves in faded, darkened night,
And mages of endless, magical might.

Surely we hate this
Place of discordial bliss,
A place that war slowly sours.
But no. This Land is Ours.

Others say that we’re wrong,
Have they heard the kender’s song?
Why can’t they see,
This land of Ayenee?

Why can’t they see,
And let us be?
I’ll always love Ayenee.
Because This Land is Ours.

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Not my best, but still decent, I believe. This is dedicated to all my friends in the Yahoo chat Roleplaying realm of Ayenee.

-Kosetsu

"No one holds command over me.
No man.
No god.
No prince."

Deranger
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since 2000-05-10

Posts 498
Somewhere, between here and there

1 posted 2001-04-22 05:26 PM

Definately interesting...kinda has a Tokken aftertaste...*Licks fingers*, well at anyrate, it goes down easy.

Two thumbs up!

Spreading insanity, one post at a time

My skull has glowing green eyes!

Child of the Stars

Senior Member

since 2000-09-07

Posts 1658
Ann Arbor, MI

2 posted 2001-04-22 06:55 PM

This land is my land, this land is your land....from California to some other highlands! Do do do do do...do do do do do...this land was made for yew and meh!

grrrrrrrrrrrrrrrrrrrrrrreat poem.
~Carly

There is pleasure in poetic pains which only poets know......~Unknown

Kosetsu
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since 2001-03-10

Posts 450
Alabama, USA

3 posted 2001-04-22 07:27 PM

*blinks at the singing Carly* woo...anyway, thanks for the comments.

-Kosetsu

"No one holds command over me.
No man.
No god.
No prince."

Low Man's Lyric
Member

since 2001-04-03

Posts 236
In a dream

4 posted 2001-04-22 10:19 PM

I liked this one Kosetsu, keep on writing.

Give her two red roses, each with a note. The first note says "For the woman I love" and the second, "For my best friend."
~Anonymous

Allan Riverwood

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since 2001-01-04

Posts 3502
Winnipeg

5 posted 2001-04-23 01:19 AM

*whistles with Carly*
Wonderful job, I was thinking FFIX when you mentioned the monkey-tailed person. haha

Ah, well. Whatever makes you purr.
~Allan

Build a man a fire, and he's warm for a day. Set a man on fire, and he'll be warm for the rest of his life.
~Unknown

Kosetsu
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since 2001-03-10

Posts 450
Alabama, USA

6 posted 2001-04-23 07:32 AM

Well, Ayenee has characters from FFIX..and 8, 7, 6, etc. The monkey-tailed man in this is actually a Saiyajin...from DBZ. Ayenee is the biggest melting pot in the world. If it has ever been thought up, you'll find a character from it in Ayenee..

-Kosetsu

"No one holds command over me.
No man.
No god.
No prince."

Fading Away

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since 2001-03-14

Posts 3131
Lynchburg, Virginia

7 posted 2001-04-23 12:02 PM

I don't understand all this FFX stuff, but I liked this poem a lot!
Nice work.

--Marie

subconsciously, i think i can eat so much to make my stomach hurt, instead of my heart.

Allan Riverwood

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since 2001-01-04

Posts 3502
Winnipeg

8 posted 2001-04-23 12:41 PM

Who mentioned FFX?

Kosetsu- Link me to your wonderful world. I am VERY interested in this.

Godsend_1
Member

since 2001-04-19

Posts 247
great state of illinois

9 posted 2001-04-23 01:41 PM

lol ok i have to say all the video games stuff is very cool lol and the fantasy world you created in the poem was very cool and dont worry marie its cool some ppl dont understand video games i wont hold it against you i still love ya hun *hugs*

hehehehehe

ben redshaw the great

i am what i am and that is all that i am and all that i shall ever be......so deal with it

Kosetsu
Member

since 2001-03-10

Posts 450
Alabama, USA

10 posted 2001-04-23 05:35 PM

Wonderful? *coughs* err...Ayenee is hell incarnate. But it is also an addiction that myself and my fellow RPers have developed. Anyway, e-mail me, and I'll fill you in on it.

-Kosetsu (seijaku_kosetsu@yahoo.com)

"No one holds command over me.
No man.
No god.
No prince."

Dopey Dope

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Member Patricius

since 2000-08-30

Posts 11132
San Juan, Puerto Rico

11 posted 2001-04-24 07:49 PM

I enjoyed this very much. For some reason i thought of it being about passions even though i knew it wasn't.
I liked it.

I was born myself, raised myself, and will continue to be myself. The world will just have to adjust.

I'm in love with my shadow
I admire it daily

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