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This Land Is Ours
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This Land Is Ours |
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Kosetsu Member
since 2001-03-10
Posts 450Alabama, USA |
And I see a small faerie, There’s a man with monkey-tail, That’s as swift as the wind’s sharp gale. Blood stains the sands, And chaos holds the lands, Knights and ladies rule, And men are like the mule. Surely we hate this Place of discordial bliss, A place that war slowly sours. But no. This Land is Ours. Power tugs us, pulls us towards Abyssal tortures and rewards Men live underneath the earth, But in the stars, life gives birth. I have seen it all, Tiny gnomes and giants tall, Wolves in faded, darkened night, And mages of endless, magical might. Surely we hate this Place of discordial bliss, A place that war slowly sours. But no. This Land is Ours. Others say that we’re wrong, Have they heard the kender’s song? Why can’t they see, This land of Ayenee? Why can’t they see, And let us be? I’ll always love Ayenee. Because This Land is Ours. ------------------------------------------------- Not my best, but still decent, I believe. This is dedicated to all my friends in the Yahoo chat Roleplaying realm of Ayenee. -Kosetsu "No one holds command over me. |
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Deranger Member
since 2000-05-10
Posts 498Somewhere, between here and there |
Definately interesting...kinda has a Tokken aftertaste...*Licks fingers*, well at anyrate, it goes down easy. Two thumbs up! Spreading insanity, one post at a time |
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Child of the Stars
since 2000-09-07
Posts 1658Ann Arbor, MI |
This land is my land, this land is your land....from California to some other highlands! Do do do do do...do do do do do...this land was made for yew and meh!  grrrrrrrrrrrrrrrrrrrrrrreat poem. ~Carly There is pleasure in poetic pains which only poets know......~Unknown |
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Kosetsu Member
since 2001-03-10
Posts 450Alabama, USA |
*blinks at the singing Carly* woo...anyway, thanks for the comments. -Kosetsu "No one holds command over me. |
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Low Man's Lyric Member
since 2001-04-03
Posts 236In a dream |
I liked this one Kosetsu, keep on writing. Give her two red roses, each with a note. The first note says "For the woman I love" and the second, "For my best friend." |
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Allan Riverwood
since 2001-01-04
Posts 3502Winnipeg |
*whistles with Carly* Wonderful job, I was thinking FFIX when you mentioned the monkey-tailed person. haha Ah, well. Whatever makes you purr. ~Allan Build a man a fire, and he's warm for a day. Set a man on fire, and he'll be warm for the rest of his life. |
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Kosetsu Member
since 2001-03-10
Posts 450Alabama, USA |
Well, Ayenee has characters from FFIX..and 8, 7, 6, etc. The monkey-tailed man in this is actually a Saiyajin...from DBZ. Ayenee is the biggest melting pot in the world. If it has ever been thought up, you'll find a character from it in Ayenee.. -Kosetsu "No one holds command over me. |
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Fading Away
since 2001-03-14
Posts 3131Lynchburg, Virginia |
I don't understand all this FFX stuff, but I liked this poem a lot! Nice work. --Marie subconsciously, i think i can eat so much to make my stomach hurt, instead of my heart. |
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Allan Riverwood
since 2001-01-04
Posts 3502Winnipeg |
Who mentioned FFX? Kosetsu- Link me to your wonderful world. I am VERY interested in this. |
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Godsend_1 Member
since 2001-04-19
Posts 247great state of illinois |
lol ok i have to say all the video games stuff is very cool lol and the fantasy world you created in the poem was very cool and dont worry marie its cool some ppl dont understand video games i wont hold it against you i still love ya hun *hugs* hehehehehe  ben redshaw the greati am what i am and that is all that i am and all that i shall ever be......so deal with it |
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Kosetsu Member
since 2001-03-10
Posts 450Alabama, USA |
Wonderful? *coughs* err...Ayenee is hell incarnate. But it is also an addiction that myself and my fellow RPers have developed. Anyway, e-mail me, and I'll fill you in on it. -Kosetsu ([email protected]) "No one holds command over me. |
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Dopey Dope
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Member Patricius
since 2000-08-30
Posts 11132San Juan, Puerto Rico |
I enjoyed this very much. For some reason i thought of it being about passions even though i knew it wasn't. I liked it.  I was born myself, raised myself, and will continue to be myself. The world will just have to adjust. |
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