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Dana Samples
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since 2001-04-07

Posts 68

0 posted 2001-04-22 04:50 PM

My soul…
once tarnished, tormented, and forgotten.
Always overflowing with,
Pain, hate, and sorrow.
Thus my soul was lost in the wreckage.
The wreckage of my beaten sanity.
Which was caused from the demons.
The demons that dance in my head,
Screaming and crying his name.
The name of my forgotten father.
The father that left me in the cold.
In the cold to die.
To die alone with him no where in sight.
The father that I will forever hate.
Thus the demons tormented my soul.
Leaving me beaten and forgotten.
The demons only recognizing me.
No human or god could see the torture of my soul.
No one to turn to.
No where to run.
No where to hide.
I can no longer take this.
(screaming in the background)
"NEVERMORE!"
I shout out loud.
Everything stops.
I am able to get up and move freely.
I start searching.
Searching for my soul.
My soul was found.
Found among the wreckage
The wreckage of my battered sanity.
All that is left is to pick up the shattered pieces,
and wash away the remains.
Washing my tarnished soul in the rain.
The rain that falls from the heavens.
Maybe now God will be able to help me.

Deranger
Member

since 2000-05-10

Posts 498
Somewhere, between here and there

1 posted 2001-04-22 06:07 PM

That was...ah...um...beautiful

Yeah, that was the word.

Spreading insanity, one post at a time

My skull has glowing green eyes!

Acies

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Member Rara Avis

since 2000-06-07

Posts 7665
Twilight Zone

2 posted 2001-04-22 06:20 PM

WOW!!! WOW!!! WOW!!!
I loved every word and every line
~*stand up and applauds*~

"So long as men can breathe or eyes can see,
So long lives this, and this give life to thee." W.S.

Allan Riverwood

Member Elite

since 2001-01-04

Posts 3502
Winnipeg

3 posted 2001-04-23 12:52 PM

Excellent, Dana. You absolutely rule.

Absolutely, is the manner in which you rule. Your state of ruling is absolute.
Need I say more?
Oh and I liked the screaming in the background. It hurt my ears.

~Allan

Build a man a fire, and he's warm for a day. Set a man on fire, and he'll be warm for the rest of his life.
~Unknown

Fading Away

Member Elite

since 2001-03-14

Posts 3131
Lynchburg, Virginia

4 posted 2001-04-23 03:22 PM

This poem is so beautiful... I can't think of anything else to describe it. You worded everything perfectly, and the flow was awesome. This amazes me! Nicely done, Dana.. very nicely done!

--Marie

subconsciously, i think i can eat so much to make my stomach hurt, instead of my heart.

anonymous albert ?

Member Elite

since 2001-03-23

Posts 2979

5 posted 2001-04-23 04:33 PM

awesome job on this..
i really enjoyed and liked this
and keep writing

ohh did i mention that this was a great poem...
ohh i did....anyways..byee

...?

death is not the greatest loss in life. the greatest loss is what dies inside us while we live. -norman cousins

Dopey Dope

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Member Patricius

since 2000-08-30

Posts 11132
San Juan, Puerto Rico

6 posted 2001-04-24 07:51 PM

Great poem. I enjoyed it very much. It hit me....POW!

I was born myself, raised myself, and will continue to be myself. The world will just have to adjust.

I'm in love with my shadow
I admire it daily

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