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DarkAngelOfTheStars Member
since 2001-04-21
Posts 255 |
All the Pain just seemed to be too much I had to let it out Now nothing will ever be the same My world has turned upside down Everything shaken carefully out Scattered on the floor for everyone to see I’m intimidated by the darkness that has surrounded me And the agony My heart is bleeding I’m empty I feel so alone So not alive Waiting to die I’m scared ps if you notcied i changed my name just in case anyone i know reads these poems! hehe never knock on deaths door and run......he hates that!! [This message has been edited by DarkAngelOfTheStars (edited 04-22-2001).] |
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anonymous albert ?
since 2001-03-23
Posts 2979 |
great job on this poem i really liked it... on yea.. i noticed kat  and keep writing   ...?death is not the greatest loss in life. the greatest loss is what dies inside us while we live. -norman cousins |
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Bishop Junior Member
since 2001-04-22
Posts 30Nottingham, England |
this is a powerful poem and i see where you r coming from! Keep writing ^*Bishop*^ |
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sleepymoongirl Member
since 2001-04-19
Posts 157bc canada |
My heart is bleeding I’m empty I feel so alone So not alive Waiting to die I’m scared i'm not sure if everyone feels this way or if u do but that was awesome i guess most of what hits me is what i get like what is like me or somthing i can't do but that was great from me as u go in life there will be ur hardships it is up to u if it makes u or breaks u. |
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Dopey Dope
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Member Patricius
since 2000-08-30
Posts 11132San Juan, Puerto Rico |
This was great. I enjoyed the poem greatly.  I was born myself, raised myself, and will continue to be myself. The world will just have to adjust. |
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Allan Riverwood
since 2001-01-04
Posts 3502Winnipeg |
I love how this poem shortened towards the end, it showed a narrowing of the words, as well as the thoughts and emotions, and everything becoming more cramped and less capable, sort of fading away... it was an excellent effect. I send you high praise for this.  ~Allan Build a man a fire, and he's warm for a day. Set a man on fire, and he'll be warm for the rest of his life. |
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Fading Away
since 2001-03-14
Posts 3131Lynchburg, Virginia |
Very nice! I enjoyed this a lot. Good job... --Marie subconsciously, i think i can eat so much to make my stomach hurt, instead of my heart. |
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Acies
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Member Rara Avis
since 2000-06-07
Posts 7665Twilight Zone |
really good write i love the style thanks for the read keep sharing "So long as men can breathe or eyes can see, |
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