Teen Poetry #4 |
to impress someone |
boarderfreak9 New Member
since 2001-04-20
Posts 3 |
2 impress some one, b yourself,to turnoff someone, try to impress them. |
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sleepymoongirl Member
since 2001-04-19
Posts 157bc canada |
interesting analisis |
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anonymous albert ?
since 2001-03-23
Posts 2979 |
the poem had some thoughts.. short and nice. i think you should take the time to write the whole word out instead of abreviating them keep writing ...? death is not the greatest loss in life. the greatest loss is what dies inside us while we live. -norman cousins |
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Dopey Dope
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Member Patricius
since 2000-08-30
Posts 11132San Juan, Puerto Rico |
Hey this was good! hehe. I liked it. I was born myself, raised myself, and will continue to be myself. The world will just have to adjust. |
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Allan Riverwood
since 2001-01-04
Posts 3502Winnipeg |
Ooh, almost a senryu. One less syllable in the center and it IS a senryu. Either way, nice poem. Still would have been neat to say "senryu!" ~Allan Build a man a fire, and he's warm for a day. Set a man on fire, and he'll be warm for the rest of his life. |
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Lakewalker Member Elite
since 2000-08-05
Posts 3289On the streets w/ people |
Good job on the poem "Be kind for everyone you meet is fighting a harder battle" Plato. |
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Jenn Cirrincione
since 2000-07-02
Posts 2107Fl |
Oh... Allan and his senryu's hahaha I agree tho... the harder you try... the more you're bound to screw up. "I've come too close to happiness, to have it swept away,don't think I can take the pain, never fall again..." Janet |
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Fading Away
since 2001-03-14
Posts 3131Lynchburg, Virginia |
I think that maybe you could go back and make this a senyru. I don't think it would be too difficult.. Anyway, very nice poem. Interesting.. made me think. Nice one. --Marie subconsciously, i think i can eat so much to make my stomach hurt, instead of my heart. |
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Acies
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Member Rara Avis
since 2000-06-07
Posts 7665Twilight Zone |
true, very true "So long as men can breathe or eyes can see, |
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