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Godsend_1 Member
since 2001-04-19
Posts 247great state of illinois |
what am i to do she entered will she return to us she has tasted that food will she like it better then ours i try and make a gourmet meal but it looks like cheap chili when she sees wut they make out there i wish i had the skill to keep her here but she deserves whats out there many things of wonder are beyond this room a room i am always in its a happy room at times and at others i feel so cold and alone why oh why does this room keep getting smaller why do you all keep leaving me although i think i understand you found a better spot to lay and now you are more comfortable i wish i could be ther but i am in my room i hope you enjoy your self out there keep safe and watch out for bears and bees and let me pray for you everyday that you will be kept safe so i say farwell i think maybe you will come back to chili even after you have had filet mingon but please enjoy your meal either way and try and rememeber a net boy [This message has been edited by Godsend_1 (edited 04-23-2001).] |
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anonymous albert ?
since 2001-03-23
Posts 2979 |
i liked this. a good write.. not cuz it wasn't written by u.  but..yea ben...no hard feelings.. this was good but y dont u post ur poem.. anyways..keep writing..  ...?death is not the greatest loss in life. the greatest loss is what dies inside us while we live. -norman cousins [This message has been edited by anonymous albert ? (edited 04-22-2001).] |
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Dopey Dope
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Member Patricius
since 2000-08-30
Posts 11132San Juan, Puerto Rico |
Posting a poem that is not by you isn't allowed here.  |
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anonymous albert ?
since 2001-03-23
Posts 2979 |
i think this is gonna get locked.. hurry post a poem of urs.........HURRY!! ..?[This message has been edited by anonymous albert ? (edited 04-22-2001).] |
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Godsend_1 Member
since 2001-04-19
Posts 247great state of illinois |
ok well here is a poem i wrote a day ago i hope ya all like it thank you for reading sorry about messing up there ppl i am not thje smartest of folks sorry *any of you think i say sorry to much *( [This message has been edited by Godsend_1 (edited 04-22-2001).] |
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knightlyshadows Senior Member
since 2001-04-14
Posts 791obscured vision |
darn it! i misseded it grrr!! ben i want to c juls poem hunnay? peeze i liked that muchs hun...*hugs* tiff  “A single choice can build destinies,or destroy them.” "at the touch of love anyone becomes a poet" [This message has been edited by knightlyshadows (edited 04-22-2001).] |
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Dopey Dope
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Member Patricius
since 2000-08-30
Posts 11132San Juan, Puerto Rico |
Very quick change. I'm glad you did that  Shows you care *hugs* hehe.Yea well I liked the poem, but it wasn't as good as some of yer others. Hope to see more. I was born myself, raised myself, and will continue to be myself. The world will just have to adjust. |
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Allan Riverwood
since 2001-01-04
Posts 3502Winnipeg |
Nice job... the title would be "cheap chili" if I was the one to title it. ~Allan Build a man a fire, and he's warm for a day. Set a man on fire, and he'll be warm for the rest of his life. |
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MindlessPoet Member
since 2001-04-20
Posts 106Texas |
nice... just needs a title.. "Cheap Chili" wouldn't be too bad. *TiMMYBoY* |
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Bishop Junior Member
since 2001-04-22
Posts 30Nottingham, England |
Good. However, it needs a title ^*Bishop*^ |
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Fading Away
since 2001-03-14
Posts 3131Lynchburg, Virginia |
It does need a title. I enjoyed this. Nice job. --Marie |
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sleepymoongirl Member
since 2001-04-19
Posts 157bc canada |
wow i missed this one from before but it was cool ben sometimes it does feel like the world is slowly closing in on u well liked it loves ya from me as u go in life there will be ur hardships it is up to u if it makes u or breaks u. |
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