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Godsend_1
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0 posted 2001-04-22 03:53 AM


what am i to do
she entered
will she return to us
she has tasted that food
will she like it better then ours
i try and make a gourmet meal
but it looks like cheap chili
when she sees wut they make out there
i wish i had the skill to keep her here
but she deserves whats out there
many things of wonder are beyond this room
a room i am always in
its a happy room at times
and at others i feel so cold and alone
why oh why does this room keep getting smaller
why do you all keep leaving me
although i think i understand
you found a better spot to lay
and now you are more comfortable
i wish i could be ther but i am in my room
i hope you enjoy your self out there
keep safe and watch out for bears and bees
and let me pray for you everyday
that you will be kept safe
so i say farwell i think
maybe you will come back to chili
even after you have had filet mingon
but please enjoy your meal either way
and try and rememeber a net boy


[This message has been edited by Godsend_1 (edited 04-23-2001).]

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anonymous albert ?
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1 posted 2001-04-22 04:05 AM


i liked this. a good write..
not cuz it wasn't written by u.


but..yea ben...no hard feelings..

this was good but y dont u post ur poem..
anyways..keep writing..


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death is not the greatest loss in life. the greatest loss is what dies inside us while we live. -norman cousins

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2 posted 2001-04-22 04:09 AM


Posting a poem that is not by you isn't allowed here.


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3 posted 2001-04-22 04:11 AM


i think this is gonna get locked..
hurry post a poem of urs.........HURRY!!

..?

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Godsend_1
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4 posted 2001-04-22 04:16 AM


ok well here is a poem i wrote a day ago i hope ya all like it thank you for reading
sorry about messing up there ppl i am not thje smartest of folks sorry *any of you think i say sorry to much *(

[This message has been edited by Godsend_1 (edited 04-22-2001).]

knightlyshadows
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5 posted 2001-04-22 03:58 PM


darn it! i misseded it grrr!!
ben i want to c juls poem hunnay? peeze
i liked that muchs hun...*hugs*
tiff


“A single choice can build destinies,or destroy them.”

"at the touch of love anyone becomes a poet"

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6 posted 2001-04-23 12:39 PM


Very quick change. I'm glad you did that   Shows you care *hugs* hehe.

Yea well I liked the poem, but it wasn't as good as some of yer others. Hope to see more.

I was born myself, raised myself, and will continue to be myself. The world will just have to adjust.

I'm in love with my shadow
I admire it daily

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7 posted 2001-04-23 01:42 AM


Nice job... the title would be "cheap chili" if I was the one to title it.  
~Allan

Build a man a fire, and he's warm for a day.  Set a man on fire, and he'll be warm for the rest of his life.  
~Unknown

MindlessPoet
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8 posted 2001-04-23 01:51 AM


nice... just needs a title.. "Cheap Chili" wouldn't be too bad.

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9 posted 2001-04-23 02:13 AM


Good.  However, it needs a title

^*Bishop*^

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10 posted 2001-04-23 11:49 AM


It does need a title.
I enjoyed this.
Nice job.

--Marie

sleepymoongirl
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11 posted 2001-04-25 08:05 PM


wow i missed this one from before but it was cool ben sometimes it does feel like the world is slowly closing in on u well liked it loves ya from me

as u go in life there will be ur hardships it is up to u if it makes u or breaks u.  

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