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knightlyshadows Senior Member
since 2001-04-14
Posts 791obscured vision |
Running around in circles, chasing my own tail. Searching for the entrance, of a secret place. Striving for achievement, but its locked away safe. Hunting down the answers, but it seems i am the prey. ok i dont know what it is. i know it needs work and stuffish and i plan too maybe, but as for the rest..when i read it it seems unfinished but in my head it is done and theres nothing else to do about it. so if u like..good for you and if u hate....o well i tried. (that sounded rude im sorry) lol newayz....there u go! tiff |
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Linc
since 2001-03-07
Posts 552The Backstreet Boy |
Hey, YOU HAVE A TAIL j/k great poem until your next -- linc "Once you reach your original goal it seems that the journey was your real accomplishment." |
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anonymous albert ?
since 2001-03-23
Posts 2979 |
no 4 reals though...if u think its done its done as its ur work y must some1 else put their hands on it to make it looked finish its fine and if u think its done jus leave it until next time..  i think i repeated myself ...but anyways..bye  ...?death is not the greatest loss in life. the greatest loss is what dies inside us while we live. -norman cousins |
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Angel Bee Member
since 2001-01-30
Posts 176Virginia |
I think this was good. As for a title well I'm not sure, Searching maybe. I don't know. Just a suggestion. Keep writing, ab *~Sometimes just holding hands is holding on to everything.~* |
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sleepymoongirl Member
since 2001-04-19
Posts 157bc canada |
hee hee hee hee that is like cutish.. and to thinks u think i be writing good stuff. it is so much harder to write happy poetry then it is to write sad stuffish likes i'm writing although i be getting better loves ya tifferz  hmmmm hope that works thinks the danceing baby is amuzing  :bouncing: |
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sleepymoongirl Member
since 2001-04-19
Posts 157bc canada |
 ha ha ha ha ha i gotz it this time there ya go tifferz love yaz keep ups the good work [This message has been edited by sleepymoongirl (edited 04-21-2001).] |
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Dopey Dope
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Member Patricius
since 2000-08-30
Posts 11132San Juan, Puerto Rico |
I enjoyed it but it wasn't as good as some of your others.  I was born myself, raised myself, and will continue to be myself. The world will just have to adjust. |
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Godsend_1 Member
since 2001-04-19
Posts 247great state of illinois |
hey look at me ppl io am a monkey heheheh .......oh wait wrong room sorry lol i loved it baby keep it up i am what i am and that is all that i am and all that i shall ever be......so deal with it |
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Allan Riverwood
since 2001-01-04
Posts 3502Winnipeg |
 @Godsend_1The poem... lesse... yes, add a few stanzas perhaps. Two more might make it seem more complete. The title? I was thinking "circles." ~Allan Build a man a fire, and he's warm for a day. Set a man on fire, and he'll be warm for the rest of his life. |
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anonymous albert ?
since 2001-03-23
Posts 2979 |
hahahaha....good one allan but...i think u got the wrong add..its Godsend_1@LOL ..hehe jus kiddin ...?[This message has been edited by anonymous albert ? (edited 04-22-2001).] |
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Fading Away
since 2001-03-14
Posts 3131Lynchburg, Virginia |
Okay, you just confused me, albert! Nice job, Tiff. I think it could be extended, but I enjoyed the read. Thanks for sharing. --Marie subconsciously, i think i can eat so much to make my stomach hurt, instead of my heart. |
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