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The Diary Of A Dying Soul
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The Diary Of A Dying Soul |
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Kicking Kim Member
since 2001-04-16
Posts 426Cloud Cucko Land! |
Diary Of A Dying Soul Eyes fixed on the mirror. Thin? Fading away. Nostalgic thoughts of a distant memory of beauty still I don't believe it. Lacking suffiency, becoming the victim of my own sacrifice, under eating to extremity. Without thinking twice. Aware of the consequences, of continuous diet, minimizing my personality, as well as my size. Food forbidden, will unwritten, insecurity hidden. Could you live like this? Thoughts controlled mind revolved. A predator upon my own flesh, feeding on mind and soul. Mind taking over body. Out of control. As I think of myself I see a wilting flower and I wonder if I ever had true beauty. "Theres no posession, just obsession and growing depression" [This message has been edited by Kicking Kim (edited 04-21-2001).] |
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anonymous albert ?
since 2001-03-23
Posts 2979 |
i loved the title. and the poem itself had so much pain in it u written it so well... but hope things r alright keep writing   ...?death is not the greatest loss in life. the greatest loss is what dies inside us while we live. -norman cousins |
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Linc
since 2001-03-07
Posts 552The Backstreet Boy |
Hey, Kim, this is...wow...this is a great poem filled with emotion. It reminded me of one of my friend. He does some of the same things in this poem. Did you wite this about yourself? Until your next wonderful poem -- Linc "Once you reach your original goal it seems that the journey was your real accomplishment." |
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Kicking Kim Member
since 2001-04-16
Posts 426Cloud Cucko Land! |
Thnx guys! Its nice to see my poems being accepted and even complimented!! ^*~Kicking Kim~*^ [This message has been edited by Kicking Kim (edited 04-21-2001).] |
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Dopey Dope
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Member Patricius
since 2000-08-30
Posts 11132San Juan, Puerto Rico |
Why wouldn't your poems be accepted, let alone not complimented? You are quite the talented writer from what I've see so far. Your poems are ver well written, this one included. Quite powerful. I liked it very much and hope to see more. I also hope that your situation with the eating problem gets better.  I was born myself, raised myself, and will continue to be myself. The world will just have to adjust. |
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Allan Riverwood
since 2001-01-04
Posts 3502Winnipeg |
My acceptance, and compliments.  Very well done, I have a close friend who could relate to this poem. I am interested to see her reply. ~Allan Build a man a fire, and he's warm for a day. Set a man on fire, and he'll be warm for the rest of his life. |
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Bishop Junior Member
since 2001-04-22
Posts 30Nottingham, England |
Wow. This is very powerful! I loved the title and the poem is fab!! plz read mine "Terminal disease". Thx |
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DarkAngelOfTheStars Member
since 2001-04-21
Posts 255 |
this poem is great i can relate so much. Keep up the good work! never knock on deaths door and run......he hates that!! |
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Deranger Member
since 2000-05-10
Posts 498Somewhere, between here and there |
Socially applied sterotypes, enforced by the mind; an evering-submitting slave to that society. Ouch. I'm sorry. I really like your poem, the pain was so obvious and exqusite. Spreading insanity, one post at a time |
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Fading Away
since 2001-03-14
Posts 3131Lynchburg, Virginia |
This one hit real hard, Kim.. very hard. I liked it. You put lots of emotion in this that really expressed how hard this situation is. Nice job, and *hugs* to you. --Marie subconsciously, i think i can eat so much to make my stomach hurt, instead of my heart. |
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Kicking Kim Member
since 2001-04-16
Posts 426Cloud Cucko Land! |
Thankyou all for the support but there is no need to worry the poem is not about me!! I am very ingrigued by Anorexia Nervosa disorder because I am interested in the psychology behind it, what makes someone so thin think they are so fat? I wrote a poem about it after reading an article in a magazine because I wanted to capture the insecurity and pain in a poem. Thankyou all so much for caring though!! *hugs you all* ^*~Kicking Kim~*^ "Theres no posession, just obsession and growing depression" |
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Heavens Tears
since 2001-03-15
Posts 677 |
After reading your reply to Tamma, I had to go find this poem you mentioned. You did a wonderful job. I am glad that you are not suffering from an eating disorder though. *Amanda* |
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Spice Senior Member
since 2001-04-13
Posts 1266Resting in my cardboard box. |
Wow Kim! Great write here! The emotion and sorrow portrayed in this is so strong that I was worried for you. I'm glad it's not about you. Anyway, like I said- Great Write! You did an amazing job. So real. Keep posting! |
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Spine Grinder Senior Member
since 2000-10-28
Posts 1127Standing In Silence... |
wow, this was great. i really enjoyed this alot.thankcs 4 the read.  fall hard, practice harder not to fall |
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anonymousfemale Member Elite
since 2000-02-02
Posts 2797Limbo |
Strong piece and I commend you for writing it. Not a lot of people can pull off eating disorder pieces but you do it well. it speaks from the heart and has an awesome flow to it. Be proud. ~AF~ "Kelly's my Hero!" "No, Kelly's your heroine." "Kelly has heroin??" "What?" |
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