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Marshalzu

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since 2001-02-15

Posts 2681
Lurking

0 posted 2001-04-21 10:56 AM

Drunk

You just cannot see
that the pain runs through my veins,
into my head
Your driving me insane
and I wish that I were dead
for all I had was love
and I am cold and all alone
I looked up high above
but I never felt at home
the hate left me burning
and I burnt out deep inside
the world it kept me turning
when I began to hide
my bones broke the silence
and the pain brought me tears
I couldn’t stand the violence
and neither could my peers
I couldn’t see the end
it wasn’t in my sight
It drove me round the bend
as I went searching for the light
the tunnel was long
and the journey hard
I couldn’t belong
I was always scarred
the long night drew close
and the end became near
I began and chose
to eliminate my fear
my heart was empty
my mind was full
but all the world was silent
and the colours became dull

<<<_Andrew_>>>

" The tree of liberty must be refreshed from time to time with the blood of patriots" -Thomas jefferson

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Linc

Senior Member

since 2001-03-07

Posts 552
The Backstreet Boy

1 posted 2001-04-21 11:40 AM

Hey,

Great poem grrrr I have to go I will be back on to finish replying in a few min stupid computer

"Once you reach your original goal it seems that the journey was your real accomplishment."

Allan Riverwood

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since 2001-01-04

Posts 3502
Winnipeg

2 posted 2001-04-21 12:15 PM

Awesome job, Zu! The last line is so excellent, it just weaves the title right into the rest of the poem so eloquently.

Very very nice job.
~Allan

Build a man a fire, and he's warm for a day. Set a man on fire, and he'll be warm for the rest of his life.
~Unknown

Fading Away

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since 2001-03-14

Posts 3131
Lynchburg, Virginia

3 posted 2001-04-21 12:36 PM

This was great, Andrew! This one's going into my library.. the way you used the title in the poem was so unique. The flow to this piece was excellent.. this is one to be proud of!
Very nicely done!

--Marie

subconsciously, i think i can eat so much to make my stomach hurt, instead of my heart.

Child of the Stars

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since 2000-09-07

Posts 1658
Ann Arbor, MI

4 posted 2001-04-21 03:45 PM

Oooohh..me liked this a lot. Yep, the ending was superb. Way to go dude!
~Carly

There is pleasure in poetic pains which only poets know......~Unknown

Dopey Dope

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Member Patricius

since 2000-08-30

Posts 11132
San Juan, Puerto Rico

5 posted 2001-04-21 08:35 PM

I enjoyed this poem. Not as much as some of your others but this did have a lot of feelings in it. I liked it.

I was born myself, raised myself, and will continue to be myself. The world will just have to adjust.

I'm in love with my shadow
I admire it daily

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