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Godsend_1
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since 2001-04-19

Posts 247
great state of illinois

0 posted 2001-04-20 01:41 PM

super pain and hate
fire ache and hurt
tings i feel
for i am hated
i am alone in a dingey world
compost happens and i am the heep
i wonder where they get this animosity
towards me i do nothign to provoke
i sit and take it cuz i afraid to fight
why do they hit me
why do they hate me
all i feel is there anger
and there stupid stupid hate towards me
i am in there domian they can do as they wish
they know i wont attack
for i am the nice guy
and i will finish dead last
in there books i am dead
and i walk out a door
and leave for a day
but i know that tomorrow i will face them again
there super hate towards me

Acies

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Member Rara Avis

since 2000-06-07

Posts 7665
Twilight Zone

1 posted 2001-04-20 02:38 PM

You've expressed yourself really well.
Maybe you need to stand up to them.
You may be a nice guy, but you still need to be treated like a real person
A person that has feelings too.
I hope things get better for you

"So long as men can breathe or eyes can see,
So long lives this, and this give life to thee." W.S.

5_sweet_kisses
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since 2001-04-20

Posts 49

2 posted 2001-04-20 05:14 PM

awww.. that is coolioz!!! ben.. you need to write more often dork :P you need to like send me some in a email.. cause i cant check this ... BUT its COOLIOZ!!! (oh btw with the other one I PROMISE!!! i wont forget you)

Allan Riverwood

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since 2001-01-04

Posts 3502
Winnipeg

3 posted 2001-04-20 08:14 PM

I could really relate to this.
A piece of advice- Learn to be amused, not annoyed.

A healthy egotism complex might be nice too, if you take the time to develop one.
I did so myself, and look how I ended up.

~Allan

Build a man a fire, and he's warm for a day. Set a man on fire, and he'll be warm for the rest of his life.
~Unknown

Child of the Stars

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since 2000-09-07

Posts 1658
Ann Arbor, MI

4 posted 2001-04-20 10:06 PM

I liked this a lot...a few spelling\grammar issues, but those can all be fixed. Way to express yourself...
~Carly

There is pleasure in poetic pains which only poets know......~Unknown

Dopey Dope

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Member Patricius

since 2000-08-30

Posts 11132
San Juan, Puerto Rico

5 posted 2001-04-21 01:24 AM

I enjoyed this poem. I hope this isn't happening to you. Being disliked isn't fun.

I was born myself, raised myself, and will continue to be myself. The world will just have to adjust.

I'm in love with my shadow
I admire it daily

Deranger
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since 2000-05-10

Posts 498
Somewhere, between here and there

6 posted 2001-04-21 02:20 AM

"compost happens and i am the heap"

That was my favorite line! Cool poem.

A (Insert lightning crashing) suggestion if i may...To me, there is a difference between being nice and being subserviant (Sp?). The world would be a great place if everyone got what they deserve...but, needless to say, they don't.

Just remember, the prime advantage of opening doors for people is the ablity to stab them in the back...

Spreading insanity, one post at a time

My skull has glowing green eyes!

anonymous albert ?

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since 2001-03-23

Posts 2979

7 posted 2001-04-21 03:00 AM

i really enjoyed this poem..
i really like it..great job
keep writing

...?

death is not the greatest loss in life. the greatest loss is what dies inside us while we live. -norman cousins

Godsend_1
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since 2001-04-19

Posts 247
great state of illinois

8 posted 2001-04-21 03:01 AM

yea i know there are some porbs with it sorry about those i kinda wrote this in a wuick spill of emotion i was being picked on at school and i wrote this to get out how i felt i plan on making it better thanx for the stuff guys

sleepymoongirl
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since 2001-04-19

Posts 157
bc canada

9 posted 2001-04-21 04:30 PM

ben i loves ya but i'm glad u can get out how u feel in poems. thats how i get it out its better then alot of the othe alternatives.

Linc

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since 2001-03-07

Posts 552
The Backstreet Boy

10 posted 2001-04-21 05:26 PM

Hey,

This was a wonderful poem even with the problems with it trust me I don't care all and when I say all my poems have alot of problems. I hope things get better for you but even if they don't right away you can always remeber the so called "dorks" or "nerds" are the ones they will be working for

anyway back to the poem it was wonderful and since I enjoyed reading it so much its going into my library. Until your next poem

-- Linc

"Once you reach your original goal it seems that the journey was your real accomplishment."

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