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Jess714 Junior Member
since 2001-04-17
Posts 10 |
Why won't you just stop? Leave us alone We are happy and you can't stop that Stop trying to break us up It isn't far how much you stress us out Leave, Leave, Leave..... Just leave us alone We want to be together And you won't stop us |
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anonymous albert ?
since 2001-03-23
Posts 2979 |
you seem to discribe the situation of what you are trying to write in ur poems. i think if you put more emotion in it.think it'll make the poem powerful to the person who reads it...anyways..i think u did a nice job.keep writing   ...?[This message has been edited by anonymous albert ? (edited 04-19-2001).] |
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Rach813 Junior Member
since 2001-04-17
Posts 30Maine |
Jess I think I know who this poem is about but I ain't sure! If it is who I think it is then its a good poem about that witch! LOL you know girl that she won't stop what we are going to be doing! I love you can't wait for you to be here! Love Always Rachel |
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cherish Senior Member
since 2001-03-25
Posts 1639swimming in fairy floss........... |
oh god..i know exactly how you feel!! god it stabbs right through to the heart...i hope you guys make it well in the end..  good poem  "Life is not long and boring, |
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Godsend_1 Member
since 2001-04-19
Posts 247great state of illinois |
good poem it said the difficulty of the situation i liked it i cant wait to read more later be strong keep cool and belive in the unreal i am out |
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Dopey Dope
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Member Patricius
since 2000-08-30
Posts 11132San Juan, Puerto Rico |
Hey, I'm sorry ok?!?! Geeesh! Hehe no....nice poem. Hard situation. Good luck!  I was born myself, raised myself, and will continue to be myself. The world will just have to adjust. |
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Fading Away
since 2001-03-14
Posts 3131Lynchburg, Virginia |
This situation doesn't seem like an easy one, that's for sure. I'm sorry that things are hard right now... I hope they get better. As for the poem, very nicely done. I think you could expand on it a little more and put more emotion into it, that might make it a little better Other than that, nicely done.--Marie subconsciously, i think i can eat so much to make my stomach hurt, instead of my heart. |
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Acies
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Member Rara Avis
since 2000-06-07
Posts 7665Twilight Zone |
This poem has made me so curious What's going on?  "So long as men can breathe or eyes can see, |
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Allan Riverwood
since 2001-01-04
Posts 3502Winnipeg |
Ooh... powerful message! And scary icon. It looks like IsGona with too much coffee in him. hehe~Allan Build a man a fire, and he's warm for a day. Set a man on fire, and he'll be warm for the rest of his life. |
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Celebi Junior Member
since 2001-04-20
Posts 17 |
You go sis. I hope we do beat that witch. And one more thing...Id just like to say soon...Welcome Home |
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