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Allan Riverwood

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since 2001-01-04

Posts 3502
Winnipeg

0 posted 2001-04-19 05:59 PM

(I'm starting to like this format...

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"Pacifist"

The planes and aircrafts overhead
a silent form, against the night
One moment live, the other, dead

The steel sounds echo in my head
the sounds of gunfire sting and bite
The planes and aircrafts overhead

No life, no love, but hate instead
illuminates with blinding light
One moment live, the other, dead

I clutch my pillows in my bed
and press my eyes shut, fearing sight
The planes and aircrafts overhead

The feel of rain, replaced with lead
by aircrafts, in their steady flight
One moment live, the other, dead

I've cried for infants, as they bled
And shrieked for those who tried to fight
The planes and aircrafts overhead
One moment live, the other, dead

Deranger
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since 2000-05-10

Posts 498
Somewhere, between here and there

1 posted 2001-04-19 06:23 PM

Yes, interesting format.

Cool poem, but one question; do the dogfights keep you up late?

Spreading insanity, one post at a time

My skull has glowing green eyes!

Low Man's Lyric
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since 2001-04-03

Posts 236
In a dream

2 posted 2001-04-19 06:50 PM

Cool poem, I liked the format and I enjoyed reading it. For some reason I enjoy reading about world war and world war 2 and I also saw some old footage taken while the german planes and the allies planes firing at each other and this poem made me think of that old footage.

Give her two red roses, each with a note. The first note says "For the woman I love" and the second, "For my best friend."
~Anonymous

Fading Away

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since 2001-03-14

Posts 3131
Lynchburg, Virginia

3 posted 2001-04-19 06:52 PM

Well, Allan.. the King of Technical Poetry.. You've done a marvelous job yet again! I like this format too.. maybe I'll try it out, if you'll help me?
Very nice job here. I really enjoyed reading this one. Bravo!

--Marie

subconsciously, i think i can eat so much to make my stomach hurt, instead of my heart.

Dopey Dope

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Member Patricius

since 2000-08-30

Posts 11132
San Juan, Puerto Rico

4 posted 2001-04-19 07:03 PM

If he's the king of technical poetry, what am I the king of?

Allan, beautiful. I loved this poem. Very well done. I felt you did great. Nothing else to say.

I was born myself, raised myself, and will continue to be myself. The world will just have to adjust.

I'm in love with my shadow
I admire it daily

anonymous albert ?

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since 2001-03-23

Posts 2979

5 posted 2001-04-19 08:08 PM

interesting on this format it fitted the poem nicely the poem itself was beautiful..
i really like it..thanks for sharing...and keep writing

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[This message has been edited by anonymous albert ? (edited 04-19-2001).]

Sabriel.s.h.lover
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since 2001-04-16

Posts 73
b.f.e. aka- Hickville

6 posted 2001-04-19 08:29 PM

Wow. This one caught my eye and is going in my library. Nice Job!

~Sabriel

Godsend_1
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since 2001-04-19

Posts 247
great state of illinois

7 posted 2001-04-19 11:46 PM

very nifty i like the cool format stuff and i thought it was cool and well written be strong keep cool and belive in the unreal cya later

banburycross
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since 2001-03-27

Posts 946
viginia

8 posted 2001-04-20 07:09 AM

Your way with words is truly incredible and your constant use of different formats keeps all your work fresh and creative. i always love reading your work, keep writing beautiful poetry.

Sometimes, the things that go unsaid are the only things worth hearing.

Starr
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since 2001-02-08

Posts 100

9 posted 2001-04-20 03:32 PM

!!WOW!!
Like the format a lot, it was well written...
beautiful as always.

Every action of our lives touches some chord that will vibrate in eternity.

Child of the Stars

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since 2000-09-07

Posts 1658
Ann Arbor, MI

10 posted 2001-04-20 11:19 PM

Cripes this format was incredible! Haha, yeah good poem kiddo......
~Carly

There is pleasure in poetic pains which only poets know......~Unknown

Acies

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Member Rara Avis

since 2000-06-07

Posts 7665
Twilight Zone

11 posted 2001-04-20 11:58 PM

format this format that....phew

The poem is good. PERIOD!!!
no ifs, no buts, and no and.....
Loved the read AR
keep it up

"So long as men can breathe or eyes can see,
So long lives this, and this give life to thee." W.S.

MindlessPoet
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since 2001-04-20

Posts 106
Texas

12 posted 2001-04-21 01:25 AM

I like the format you used there, too. A good read

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