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Pride in false idols.
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Pride in false idols. |
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Marshalzu  
since 2001-02-15
Posts 2681Lurking 
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Pride in false idols. We all got a little bit proud, Lost ourselves amongst the crowd, Hailed ourselves as a new age god, Conquered people in the land of nod, Couldn’t bare to show our roots, Snobbery destroyed our few fruits, Maybe we were a little slow, Weathermen predicting snow, Critics were our final destruction, All we needed was some construction. Poetic pains that we didn’t feel, Because we forgot that we were real <<<_ Andrew _>>> " No Army can conquer a galaxy, yet faith alone can overturn the universe." |
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anonymous albert ?
since 2001-03-23
Posts 2979 |
nice job! i liked how u wrote this... keep writing   ...? |
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Allan Riverwood
since 2001-01-04
Posts 3502Winnipeg |
Ooh..... good job on this Zu! Very good job, couplets are nice in this type of poem!  ~Allan Build a man a fire, and he's warm for a day. Set a man on fire, and he'll be warm for the rest of his life. |
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Dopey Dope
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Member Patricius
since 2000-08-30
Posts 11132San Juan, Puerto Rico |
Very well done. I enjoyed this poem greatly Keep postin and i'll keep reading!  I was born myself, raised myself, and will continue to be myself. The world will just have to adjust. |
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Fading Away
since 2001-03-14
Posts 3131Lynchburg, Virginia |
I really liked the way you used the couplets here. Very nice job! I enjoyed this. Nicely done. --Marie subconsciously, i think i can eat so much to make my stomach hurt, instead of my heart. |
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Heart=Life Junior Member
since 2001-02-03
Posts 29United Kingdom |
I also feel you did a great job on the couplets, very good work |
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banburycross Senior Member
since 2001-03-27
Posts 946viginia |
YAY!! fun with couplets. couplets are fun. this poem is fun. i like fun. right.... anyway, great job on this, i liked the format a lot. keep posting your work. Sometimes, the things that go unsaid are the only things worth hearing. |
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Acies
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Member Rara Avis
since 2000-06-07
Posts 7665Twilight Zone |
very interesting thoughts. nicely done my friend. "So long as men can breathe or eyes can see, |
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Godsend_1 Member
since 2001-04-19
Posts 247great state of illinois |
very god job man i enjoyed reading it i heard the message i cant wait to read more of your stuff bye bye for now i am what i am and that is all that i am and all that i shall ever be......so deal with it |
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Marshalzu
since 2001-02-15
Posts 2681Lurking |
Thanks Guys for all the replies... I guess you all love those couplets. <<<_Andrew_>>> " No Army can conquer a galaxy, yet faith alone can overturn the universe." |
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