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A happy memory of you
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A happy memory of you |
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Angel Bee Member
since 2001-01-30
Posts 176Virginia |
A happy memory of you If I tell you I'll never go away will you promise never to leave and not tell me lies i believe You see, I've been in pain before my heart was broken into a million pieces and now my trust in people decreases i know what heart break means now and im so scared that it will happen with you that pain in more than i can go through im falling for you so quickly and it scares me to death what if you walk away with my breath i won't able to go on with myself so if i tell you my feelings, promise me you'll never go its taking so much to let you know im putting my heart in your hands promise you won't break it with out a care that pain is more than i can bear so please keep my feelings in mind if you decide to leave me alone and break my heart into stone i trust you though my friend i know you will be better than the last for you will be happy memory from the past *~Sometimes just holding hands is holding on to everything.~* |
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Dopey Dope
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Member Patricius
since 2000-08-30
Posts 11132San Juan, Puerto Rico |
I liked this. I hope he doesn't break your heart. good luck with him.  I was born myself, raised myself, and will continue to be myself. The world will just have to adjust. |
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Fading Away
since 2001-03-14
Posts 3131Lynchburg, Virginia |
This is a nice piece. It's got a great flow, and the rhyme scheme works very well. Nice job! --Marie subconsciously, i think i can eat so much to make my stomach hurt, instead of my heart. |
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Allan Riverwood
since 2001-01-04
Posts 3502Winnipeg |
I really like this, the scheme of rhyme is quite original.  Good job!~Allan Build a man a fire, and he's warm for a day. Set a man on fire, and he'll be warm for the rest of his life. |
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Acies
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Member Rara Avis
since 2000-06-07
Posts 7665Twilight Zone |
That was a beautiful read Angelbee. This I think is one of your most expressive poems. Thanks for sharing and keep posting "So long as men can breathe or eyes can see, |
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SEA 
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Member Seraphic
since 2000-01-18
Posts 22676with you |
this is really sweet SEA |
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Heavens Tears
since 2001-03-15
Posts 677 |
I really liked this one. It showed a lot of emotions and thoughts that I can relate to, and I guess everyone can. Keep it up! *~*Amanda*~* |
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