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knightlyshadows
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obscured vision

0 posted 2001-04-18 11:08 PM



I look back to see nothing
A nothing that was never there
Only a pretense of a shadow
A shadow that was nothing
I look back and i am shadowless
I AM SHADOWLESS

© Copyright 2001 Tiffany Durham - All Rights Reserved
fozzyozzy
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since 2001-03-15
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1 posted 2001-04-18 11:11 PM


Whoa.  You have a gift here.  I really had to read it twice to understand it.  Good job. I'm pleased to be the first to welcome you to Passions.

"The heart can think of no devotion
Greater than being shore to ocean
Holding the curve of one position
Counting an endless repetition"
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LoneWolf
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2 posted 2001-04-18 11:47 PM


first off i want to tell you that i liked this poem. and welcome to passions.

It's too bad I'm not as wonderful a person as people say I am, because the world could use a few people like that.

I've learned that even when you

lonely*soul
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3 posted 2001-04-19 07:48 AM


im with fozzy..i had to read it twice till i got the full swing (maybe im just a bit on the tired side..either that or im just a bit slow!!!) anywasy i liked it and welcome to passions hun!!!
     <3  ~*KiMmIe*~

" im surrounded by people, but yet im still all alone"

banburycross
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viginia
4 posted 2001-04-19 09:56 AM


Welocome to passions!!  this is a really great first post, you have a lot of talent.  i look forward to reading lots more from you in the future.

Sometimes, the things that go unsaid are the only things worth hearing.

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5 posted 2001-04-19 09:57 AM


Welcome to Passions!  I enjoyed this a lot.. this was another one that got me thinking.  Nicely done, and I can't wait to read more from you.

--Marie

subconsciously, i think i can eat so much to make my stomach hurt, instead of my heart.

Allan Riverwood
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6 posted 2001-04-19 11:36 AM


Wow, the last line blew me away.  
I liked that repitition, it gave the line a more accentuated feel.  Well done, and welcome to Passions in Poetry.
~Allan

Build a man a fire, and he's warm for a day.  Set a man on fire, and he'll be warm for the rest of his life.  
~Unknown

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7 posted 2001-04-19 02:42 PM


You have a talent for short poems with deep meaning. Very well done.

I was born myself, raised myself, and will continue to be myself. The world will just have to adjust.

I'm in love with my shadow
I admire it daily

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8 posted 2001-04-19 02:45 PM


It was short, but it was powerful.  Great job!  I agree w/ Allan, you do have a talent for short poems.  Keep posting!

*If the only place I can live my dreams is in my sleep, then I'll sleep forever!*

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9 posted 2001-04-19 03:19 PM


  Hey there, and welcome to Passions. You're going to love it here...these people rock. This was a very good poem, it brought out the thinker in me...Great job, and enjoy the place!
  ~Carly

(And...check your e-mail. )

There is pleasure in poetic pains which only poets know......~Unknown

Kicking Kim
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10 posted 2001-04-20 05:10 PM


Lovely poem I thoroughley enjoyed it! Interesting, intriguing and inspiring, well written!

"Theres no posession, just obsession and growing depression"

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11 posted 2001-04-22 11:33 AM


Welcome to passions!!!!

Wow...amazing talent is shining through in your piece!! This was very impressive and i too like a few others had to read it twice to fully appreciate it, but sometimes those are the best poems if they are not so simple that you only have to read it once. This was extraordinary and i am dying to see what else you bring to us!!

Bishop
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12 posted 2001-04-22 02:07 PM


Well done.  A very good short poem!  Carry on doing ur thing, short poems

^*Bishop*^

*Evil has many faces, and I'm one of them*

sleepymoongirl
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13 posted 2001-04-22 02:34 PM


hey tifferz u bee a likes showdow likes person likes dude knightlySHADOWS!!! like gee whiz dude   twas a cool poem short and sweet

as u go in life there will be ur hardships it is up to u if it makes u or breaks u.  

knightlyshadows
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obscured vision
14 posted 2001-04-22 03:43 PM


lol@scarlet ...for real i have like 3 s/ns with shadow in em! lol :P
tiff

“A single choice can build destinies,or destroy them.”

"at the touch of love anyone becomes a poet"

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15 posted 2001-04-27 04:59 PM


WELCOME TO PASSIONS!!!

What a first post to share to us.  I t shows so much meaning into it and at the same time so much question to one's self.  thanks for deciding to join us here in passions for poetry.  hope you enjoy readng as well as sharing your own work

"So long as men can breathe or eyes can see,
So long lives this, and this give life to thee."  W.S.

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with you
16 posted 2001-04-27 05:28 PM


Tiffy girl...this is awesome    SEA
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