Mine and the Cosmos' Empathy

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Teen Poetry #4

Mine and the Cosmos' Empathy

fozzyozzy
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since 2001-03-15

Posts 336
Lessburg Virginia

0 posted 2001-04-18 09:47 PM

Mine and the Cosmos' Empathy

A sky's burning arms
Held up in harmony with mine
For out of my view I see
A sky blazing so
Shining triumphantly
Powerful, golden coins founded
The moon and stars circle round it
Death bed for the sun
Before Man sets and is done
The clouds parting; a still life
Begotten of life itself
Seem to cower under that
Which is so far away;
And I, Sean, strode effortlessly
Locked in an embrace set aside
For a countless period of time;
Now the sun's dying limbs
Thrust forth unto me
As I raise my soul
With the universe in harmony
Ever so triumphantly

"The heart can think of no devotion
Greater than being shore to ocean
Holding the curve of one position
Counting an endless repetition"
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Dopey Dope

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Member Patricius

since 2000-08-30

Posts 11132
San Juan, Puerto Rico

1 posted 2001-04-19 03:07 AM

I enjoyed this. I liked how you plugged in the name Sean. I just liked the whole thing. Good job.

I was born myself, raised myself, and will continue to be myself. The world will just have to adjust.

I'm in love with my shadow
I admire it daily

lonely*soul
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since 2001-04-05

Posts 396
east haddam (moodus) ct :)

2 posted 2001-04-19 08:16 AM

hey i liked this too...very nice (and i like your lil quote on the bottom too hehe)

<3 *KiM*

" im surrounded by people, but yet im still all alone"

Fading Away

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since 2001-03-14

Posts 3131
Lynchburg, Virginia

3 posted 2001-04-19 09:39 AM

I liked this a lot, fozzy. This was a pleasure to read, as always. Keep posting.

--Marie

subconsciously, i think i can eat so much to make my stomach hurt, instead of my heart.

Child of the Stars

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since 2000-09-07

Posts 1658
Ann Arbor, MI

4 posted 2001-04-19 03:40 PM

I read this a few times and pictured the whole scene....magnificent, really...Very nice one here...Enjoyed LOTS...
~Carly

There is pleasure in poetic pains which only poets know......~Unknown

Allan Riverwood

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since 2001-01-04

Posts 3502
Winnipeg

5 posted 2001-04-19 05:13 PM

Great job on this one, Sean.

I like the steady progressiveness of it as I read... you told the story well.
~Allan

Build a man a fire, and he's warm for a day. Set a man on fire, and he'll be warm for the rest of his life.
~Unknown

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