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Isabel Galaxia
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0 posted 2001-01-18 09:12 PM


Dear everyone, this is not meant to be depressing.  Please don't feel obligated to say it's good or anything of the sort, because I don't think it is, it's just something I thought of recently.  Sorry it's so long, sorry for wasting your time,
Bel


In a crowd surrounded
Standing alone
Seeing straight through me
My presence unknown
Maybe a loner
Not a social butterfly
Key to them
Never see you cry
Having but lacking
Complete but incomplete
Frozen solid
Escaping the heat
Consumed by fear
Shunned by panic
"Blanca como la leche"(White as milk)
Perhaps looking distantly sick
Starving for truth
Throwing lies
Solid facade
Plastered disguise
Intelligent
Ignorant and innocent
Read between the lies
know what it meant
Food back on the plate
Slip it under the table
Throw it away
Beauty, magical fable
Merciless
Exercise until you can't anymore
Craving affection
Running through the door
Secret hope
Acceptance, care
Though I'm in love
Need someone there
In a crowd screaming
No one can hear
In a crowd surrounded
No one comes near

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jeremydraul
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State of Despair
1 posted 2001-01-18 09:37 PM


wow... really liked the form
the flow was neat also
me liked.

~JDR

"Most people are other people. Their thoughts are someone else's opinions, their lives a mimicry, their passions a quotation." -Oscar Wilde

Child of the Stars
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Ann Arbor, MI
2 posted 2001-01-18 09:55 PM


   Wasting my time?? With these kickin words?? Nooo.
Having but lacking
Complete but incomplete
Frozen solid
Escaping the heat

Different, and refreshing. Carly likes very much!!
  ~Carly


inspiration of my art search for light out of the dark all the pictures in my heart lie awake there in my fog...

DancinQueen
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3 posted 2001-01-18 10:08 PM


oh how i love your work~ i wish youd post more often  

¤Sometimes the hardest thing to get over, is something you never really had¤

Dopey Dope
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4 posted 2001-01-18 10:47 PM


I actually thought this was a pretty good poem. And i'm not just sayin that.....good job on this!


I was born myself, raised myself, and will continue to be myself. The world will just have to adjust.

I'm in love with my shadow
I admire it daily

Lakewalker
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since 2000-08-05
Posts 3289
On the streets w/ people
5 posted 2001-01-19 01:05 PM


I liked what Carly said:  "Different, and refreshing."  That's very true.  nice job on this.

"Disagreements stimulate thought, thought stimulates action, and action stimulates life." --Lakewalker
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Isabel Galaxia
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since 2000-06-18
Posts 733

6 posted 2001-01-21 10:47 AM


Jeremy- Thanks   I thought it sucked.
Child of the Stars- Different and refreshing....hmmmm.....thanks  
DancinQueen- I'm glad to know someone does.
Dopey- Thanks, that means quite a lot coming from you
Lakewalker- Thank you    

Thanks everyone once again, I wasn't expecting it
Bel

Acies
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Twilight Zone
7 posted 2001-01-22 04:46 PM


You penned your emotions pretty well on this one.
Why you thought that you were just gonna waste our time, i don't know
reading someone's emotions or feelings written down in paper is never a waste of time  

I see no changes, wake up in the morning I ask myself, "Is life worth living or should I blast myself" TUPAC SHAKUR



anonymousfemale
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Posts 2797
Limbo
8 posted 2001-09-08 04:31 AM


"Starving for truth
Throwing lies
Solid facade
Plastered disguise"

"Secret hope
Acceptance, care
Though I'm in love
Need someone there
In a crowd screaming
No one can hear
In a crowd surrounded
No one comes near"

WOW...You have such a way with words and have captured such amazing emotions. You are really starting to get my creative juices flowing again.

Thanks for the read. Great work.

~AF~

"Kelly's my Hero!" "No, Kelly's your heroine." "Kelly has heroin??" "What?"

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