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Isabel Galaxia Senior Member
since 2000-06-18
Posts 733
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Dear everyone, this is not meant to be depressing. Please don't feel obligated to say it's good or anything of the sort, because I don't think it is, it's just something I thought of recently. Sorry it's so long, sorry for wasting your time, Bel In a crowd surrounded Standing alone Seeing straight through me My presence unknown Maybe a loner Not a social butterfly Key to them Never see you cry Having but lacking Complete but incomplete Frozen solid Escaping the heat Consumed by fear Shunned by panic "Blanca como la leche"(White as milk) Perhaps looking distantly sick Starving for truth Throwing lies Solid facade Plastered disguise Intelligent Ignorant and innocent Read between the lies know what it meant Food back on the plate Slip it under the table Throw it away Beauty, magical fable Merciless Exercise until you can't anymore Craving affection Running through the door Secret hope Acceptance, care Though I'm in love Need someone there In a crowd screaming No one can hear In a crowd surrounded No one comes near |
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jeremydraul Senior Member
since 2000-08-01
Posts 1118State of Despair |
wow... really liked the form the flow was neat also me liked. ~JDR "Most people are other people. Their thoughts are someone else's opinions, their lives a mimicry, their passions a quotation." -Oscar Wilde |
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Child of the Stars
since 2000-09-07
Posts 1658Ann Arbor, MI |
Wasting my time?? With these kickin words?? Nooo. Having but lacking Complete but incomplete Frozen solid Escaping the heat Different, and refreshing. Carly likes very much!! ~Carly inspiration of my art search for light out of the dark all the pictures in my heart lie awake there in my fog... |
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DancinQueen
since 2000-07-29
Posts 1092Kokomo,IN,USA |
oh how i love your work~ i wish youd post more often  ¤Sometimes the hardest thing to get over, is something you never really had¤ |
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Dopey Dope
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Member Patricius
since 2000-08-30
Posts 11132San Juan, Puerto Rico |
I actually thought this was a pretty good poem. And i'm not just sayin that.....good job on this!  I was born myself, raised myself, and will continue to be myself. The world will just have to adjust. I'm in love with my shadow I admire it daily |
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Lakewalker Member Elite
since 2000-08-05
Posts 3289On the streets w/ people |
I liked what Carly said: "Different, and refreshing." That's very true. nice job on this. "Disagreements stimulate thought, thought stimulates action, and action stimulates life." --Lakewalker http://www.thehungersite.com |
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Isabel Galaxia Senior Member
since 2000-06-18
Posts 733 |
Jeremy- Thanks I thought it sucked.Child of the Stars- Different and refreshing....hmmmm.....thanks  DancinQueen- I'm glad to know someone does. Dopey- Thanks, that means quite a lot coming from you Lakewalker- Thank you Thanks everyone once again, I wasn't expecting it Bel |
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Acies
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Member Rara Avis
since 2000-06-07
Posts 7665Twilight Zone |
You penned your emotions pretty well on this one. Why you thought that you were just gonna waste our time, i don't know reading someone's emotions or feelings written down in paper is never a waste of time  I see no changes, wake up in the morning I ask myself, "Is life worth living or should I blast myself" TUPAC SHAKUR |
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anonymousfemale Member Elite
since 2000-02-02
Posts 2797Limbo |
"Starving for truth Throwing lies Solid facade Plastered disguise" "Secret hope Acceptance, care Though I'm in love Need someone there In a crowd screaming No one can hear In a crowd surrounded No one comes near" WOW...You have such a way with words and have captured such amazing emotions. You are really starting to get my creative juices flowing again. Thanks for the read. Great work. ~AF~ "Kelly's my Hero!" "No, Kelly's your heroine." "Kelly has heroin??" "What?" |
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