Teen Poetry #4 |
the "she" god |
Morouxshi San Member
since 2000-10-11
Posts 207San Juan, Puerto Rico |
part of the "hardest break-up" sessions. i dont really like this one. but i think some of you might. -=The "She" god=- words wasted in the vacancy of you ungreatful god blasphemy of my religion incredibly credible its over, you and me its one of the unintentional accidents that happen while we sleep. -San San, the wise San, the dumb San, the guy... |
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jeremydraul Senior Member
since 2000-08-01
Posts 1118State of Despair |
nice... reading it backwards helps the meaning too! Good job... I like this whole "hardest Break-Up" sessions thing, creative. ~JDR "Most people are other people. Their thoughts are someone else's opinions, their lives a mimicry, their passions a quotation." -Oscar Wilde |
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Dopey Dope
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Member Patricius
since 2000-08-30
Posts 11132San Juan, Puerto Rico |
Sweet......Nice.... Haha no... anyway San, nice job on this one. I truly enjoyed this one. "She" God........yea....quotations for that one eh? Anyway nice job.......stay in the kitchen cuz I think things are gonna cool down around here. I was born myself, raised myself, and will continue to be myself. The world will just have to adjust. I'm in love with my shadow I admire it daily |
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Allan Riverwood
since 2001-01-04
Posts 3502Winnipeg |
Yes, what can i say? San does it again. Very nice, my friend. "Allan, don't ever be afraid to disappoint me" -Amanda (the most meaningful thing that has ever been said to me) |
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Lakewalker Member Elite
since 2000-08-05
Posts 3289On the streets w/ people |
"words wasted in the vacancy of you" I love that beginning, good job on the poem "Disagreements stimulate thought, thought stimulates action, and action stimulates life." --Lakewalker http://www.thehungersite.com |
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Child of the Stars
since 2000-09-07
Posts 1658Ann Arbor, MI |
Ahh my mouse failed to direct me to this one right away...You've got some pretty intense thoughts in this one, I think. Keep bein you. ~Carly inspiration of my art search for light out of the dark all the pictures in my heart lie awake there in my fog... |
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~sugarpie313~ Member
since 2000-09-14
Posts 375Maine, USA |
This poem kicked major ARSE hehehehe i love it. it's soooo... deep. has real meaning. i like these type of poems. based on personal experience, it makes them that much more touching. keep it up. Valerie *...Remember your roots, my friend they're right down below, because heroes come and heroes go...* - Creed |
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