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jeremydraul Senior Member
since 2000-08-01
Posts 1118State of Despair 
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In this poem "Ripe" and "Fresh" stand for two different things... it's not too hard to understand. Enjoy. "Ripe or Fresh" Will of fighting Is thinning to water It’s not delighting To kind of want her She pushes and whines Inflates sorrow heart These confusing signs Shift us apart Another is trying To gain my eyes She isn’t into lying Or moaning sighs Does knowledge sing? I'm incapable to know Put them in the ring And lets see ‘em go! J.D. Raulinaitis 1/15/01 < !signature--> "Most people are other people. Their thoughts are someone else's opinions, their lives a mimicry, their passions a quotation." -Oscar Wilde [This message has been edited by jeremydraul (edited 01-16-2001).] |
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Allan Riverwood
since 2001-01-04
Posts 3502Winnipeg |
Jeremy, I had not a clue that you were such a ladies' man! Keep up the good work, you heartbreaker! -Allan [This message has been edited by Allan Riverwood (edited 01-16-2001).] |
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Poet on Acid Member
since 2001-01-07
Posts 325Florida, USA |
I motion to 2nd Allan's notion. nice one dude. >¶Øʆ< |
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anonymousfemale Member Elite
since 2000-02-02
Posts 2797Limbo |
Jer: I cannot say anything that Allan has not already said.  However I can say nice Rhyme and Flow. Nice. ~AF~ "Poetry is the language in which man explores his own amazement." Christopher Fry "Do not dwell in the past, do not dream of the future, concentra |
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Dopey Dope
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Member Patricius
since 2000-08-30
Posts 11132San Juan, Puerto Rico |
Nice one here jer. I liked this one. Me likes de puem a lut  I was born myself, raised myself, and will continue to be myself. The world will just have to adjust. I'm in love with my shadow I admire it daily |
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Lakewalker Member Elite
since 2000-08-05
Posts 3289On the streets w/ people |
So, you want to see them fight over you, hey. Nice job on this "Disagreements stimulate thought, thought stimulates action, and action stimulates life." --Lakewalker http://www.thehungersite.com |
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jeremydraul Senior Member
since 2000-08-01
Posts 1118State of Despair |
that bad? any more replies? sorry Im desperate!!!!!! "Most people are other people. Their thoughts are someone else's opinions, their lives a mimicry, their passions a quotation." -Oscar Wilde |
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Acies
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Member Rara Avis
since 2000-06-07
Posts 7665Twilight Zone |
sorry I got this poem a little late hmmmmm.......your poem is really making me think right now I don't wanna say follow your heart cause it does sometimes lead you astray you know, if any of them is right for you, you should know by now. You wouldn't be trying to choose...you would know the person that you want right from the start. I see no changes, wake up in the morning I ask myself, "Is life worth living or should I blast myself" TUPAC SHAKUR |
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