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LoneWolf
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since 2001-03-10

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0 posted 2001-04-11 01:08 AM

“Balance”

Balance of powere to restore ones soul
Knowing its importance as the greatest role
It joins all things in haromy
Like the waves of the sea

For there to be light there must be darkness
We cannot have one or the other for then its all a mess
See one can’t exist with out the other
just like there can be no child without a mother

then there can be no living without dying
if this is what you seek then you better stop trying
for it will be to late in the end
and life you will be unable to mend

the shadows we face are cast by the light
will we ever see this, to know it is right?
To feel the balance, the order of life
Without this we shall fall to schyth

While living in this balance we never truly die
Feeling the nature of things, is what we must try
Being one with all we leave our legacy behind
As a true human beign who let their spirit shine

The Balance of narture, the order of ways
Is the only way to live through these days
Find the balance, the Yin/Yang of your heart
And upon this path you shall start.

It's too bad I'm not as wonderful a person as people say I am, because the world could use a few people like that.

I've learned that even when you

Child of the Stars

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since 2000-09-07

Posts 1658
Ann Arbor, MI

1 posted 2001-04-11 06:48 AM

Very nice job here, the flow was a bit broken and stuffs but other than that, wording was excellentay.

~Carly

NOTE TO SELF: Live to love and love to live.

Heavens Tears

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since 2001-03-15

Posts 677

2 posted 2001-04-11 10:08 AM

It was a good poem, but could have had a better pattern or a little more flow. Other than that it was pretty good.

*If the only place I can live my dreams is in my sleep, then I'll sleep forever!*

Allan Riverwood

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since 2001-01-04

Posts 3502
Winnipeg

3 posted 2001-04-11 10:29 AM

Perfect! I know exactly what you are saying, I agree 100%. The shadows we see are cast by the light....

~Allan

Love is like the wind; it can suddenly blow softly in your face or it can come strong.
~~Aaron (Low Man's Lyric)

Dark Enchantress
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since 1999-07-27

Posts 1258
meet Morgana

4 posted 2001-04-11 11:20 AM

Truly excellent my dear. I love how your mind works.

I had a dream once that I could fly and I laughed at everyone and kicked them in the back of the head because they couldn't fly too. :)

banburycross
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since 2001-03-27

Posts 946
viginia

5 posted 2001-04-11 11:22 AM

The flow breaks off in a couple places but the concept of this poem and of this set of poems is what i really like. without the concept of evil there would be no concept of goodness.

Sometimes, the things that go unsaid are the only things worth hearing.

Fading Away

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since 2001-03-14

Posts 3131
Lynchburg, Virginia

6 posted 2001-04-11 04:37 PM

As everyone said, the flow does break in a few spots, but other than that this is a very well written piece. Nicely done.

--Marie

subconsciously, i think i can eat so much to make my stomach hurt, instead of my heart.

Attack Ferrit
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since 2001-04-09

Posts 41
texas

7 posted 2001-04-11 06:39 PM

not to be redundant but ill say the flow was off as well. other than that great poem.

everything is skin deep

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Dopey Dope

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Member Patricius

since 2000-08-30

Posts 11132
San Juan, Puerto Rico

8 posted 2001-04-11 09:17 PM

The flow was a bit off, but the message wasn't. Wonderful job.

I was born myself, raised myself, and will continue to be myself. The world will just have to adjust.

I'm in love with my shadow
I admire it daily

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