Teen Poetry #4 |
Why? |
Empty tears Member
since 2001-03-12
Posts 64 |
Why are we born? Why do we die? Why do we smile? Why do we cry? Why is there love? Why is there pain? Why is there sunshine? Why is there rain? Why do we hate? Why do we forgive? Why Do we die Why do we live Death is but an escape from loneliness |
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Acies
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Member Rara Avis
since 2000-06-07
Posts 7665Twilight Zone |
oh, the questions of life things happen for a reason look at it this way, without the bad, how can we truly appreciate the good thanks for sharing "So long as men can breathe or eyes can see, |
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Allan Riverwood
since 2001-01-04
Posts 3502Winnipeg |
You should have stuck with one-syllable words to end each line. It would have a better flow. ~Allan The sun was born, so it shall die. ~VNV Nation, "Further" |
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Fading Away
since 2001-03-14
Posts 3131Lynchburg, Virginia |
This isn't a bad post.. not the best I've seen from you, but it was still a good read. These are many questions that everyone encounters sometime throughout life. You're not the only one wondering those same thoughts. Nice job. --Marie "Hope is a thing with feathers that perches in the soul." --Emily Dickinson |
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anonymous albert ?
since 2001-03-23
Posts 2979 |
it was ok but good thoughts you should explore more into the poem it'll make this poem a lot better even though its nice this way. keep writing |
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Child of the Stars
since 2000-09-07
Posts 1658Ann Arbor, MI |
When I asked the world, they told me "because." So when I find the answers, I'll letcha know. Good poem. ~Carly NOTE TO SELF: Live to love and love to live. |
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Heavens Tears
since 2001-03-15
Posts 677 |
Chills... All the "questions of life" in one poem. Good job. *If the only place I can live my dreams is in my sleep, then I'll sleep forever!* |
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DancinQueen
since 2000-07-29
Posts 1092Kokomo,IN,USA |
"Some questions are better off left unanswered." *dq ¤Sometimes the hardest thing to get over, is something you never really had¤ |
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Dopey Dope
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Member Patricius
since 2000-08-30
Posts 11132San Juan, Puerto Rico |
Why did you write Why did you spell You did this poem SO very well. ok now allan is gonna get me cuz the meter was wrong. Oh nO! RUN!!! very well done! I was born myself, raised myself, and will continue to be myself. The world will just have to adjust. |
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Low Man's Lyric Member
since 2001-04-03
Posts 236In a dream |
Good poem. Too bad I don't have the answers you seek. "Eat, drink and be merry for tomorrow you die." |
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xShUgArHiGhx
since 2000-09-26
Posts 3150tRyIn tO fIt iN2 mY oWn ShoEs |
Good poem but Oh god...if only someone had these answers!!! |
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Linc
since 2001-03-07
Posts 552The Backstreet Boy |
Hey, This is a cool poem, it reminded me of my poem questions and got me thinking again thanks for the great read -- Linc "Once you reach your original goal it seems that the journey was your real accomplishment." |
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Silver Butterfly Junior Member
since 2001-03-13
Posts 42Between here and the end |
First let me say sweet poem, it rhymes well and everything! *sniffles* I'm so proud. One thing though, a lot of the.... I dunno... the word over-used comes to mind. Something is overused. Though I don't know how to phrase what I'm thinking. This is beautifully composed despite. |
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IsGona Senior Member
since 2000-07-14
Posts 723 |
I took a philosophy course last year and the professor was really tough, but for his final he gave us 1 question, and he wrote it on the board: "WHY?" Every body wrote for hours and hours(including my self) incorporating all these theories and ideas we had talked about but the only person to get an A wrote one simple word, and Carly already mentioned it: "Because" So there ya go. Sometimes the answer is just "because." The hard part is excepting that answer. And I don't know if we should or not. Anyhow I'm way off track here nice poem, I enjoyed it. Jason |
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