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Your Love is a Show
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shadydaze Member
since 2000-10-02
Posts 85 |
Your smile is not shining. You're eyes do not glimmer. Your voice is not sweet when the truth does not shimmer in the darkness you bring when your face does not glow. Because of your secrets, your love is a show. |
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Child of the Stars
since 2000-09-07
Posts 1658Ann Arbor, MI |
Very nice job here...I liked it furry muchos  ~Carly NOTE TO SELF: Live to love and love to live. |
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LoveBug
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since 2000-01-08
Posts 4697 |
"Your smile is not shining. You're eyes do not glimmer. Your voice is not sweet when the truth does not shimmer" A relationship without truth can't last. I'm glad you realize this, and I just hope this person realizes this soon. Thanks for sharing.  "Men judge generally more by the eye than by the hand, for everyone can see and few can feel."-Machiavelli |
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LoveBug
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since 2000-01-08
Posts 4697 |
Oops... I feel dumb  [This message has been edited by LoveBug (edited 04-10-2001).] |
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Allan Riverwood
since 2001-01-04
Posts 3502Winnipeg |
Very simple, very short. I think it was a fine poem. ~Allan The sun was born, so it shall die. ~VNV Nation, "Further" |
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Fading Away
since 2001-03-14
Posts 3131Lynchburg, Virginia |
I think this is a good poem. Very short and sweet Thanks for sharing and nice job. --Marie "Hope is a thing with feathers that perches in the soul." --Emily Dickinson |
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banburycross Senior Member
since 2001-03-27
Posts 946viginia |
some of the best poems are those that express their ideas in the fewest words possible. i thought you did an excellent job on this piece, keep posting your work. Sometimes, the things that go unsaid are the only things worth hearing. |
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Dopey Dope
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Member Patricius
since 2000-08-30
Posts 11132San Juan, Puerto Rico |
Very well written. I enjoyed this poem. To the point, short, but with a lot of feeling and I appreciate that.  I was born myself, raised myself, and will continue to be myself. The world will just have to adjust. |
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Pixie-Babe03 Member
since 2000-08-29
Posts 387Central Maine |
I liked this a lot! short and sweet! -=Justine=- |
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Acies
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Member Rara Avis
since 2000-06-07
Posts 7665Twilight Zone |
nice way to express yourself. short and direct to the point. thanks for sharing "So long as men can breathe or eyes can see, |
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xShUgArHiGhx
since 2000-09-26
Posts 3150tRyIn tO fIt iN2 mY oWn ShoEs |
OoOoOoOoOoO very nice!! Short and sweet...purrrrfect |
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