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Heavens Tears
since 2001-03-15
Posts 677
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It destroys the world I live in It disenigrates all stability in my life It demolishes all traces of happiness Like waves pounding onto the rocky shores For once I can say that I didnt cause it Its like a force of nature in my life And I am always stuck in the middle Even though I try so hard to escape But I am trapped by it all Like a giant spider web clinging to me And the only way to escape Is to break the carefully crafted web But the web of my life Would only tangle more Making my existance Even more complicated And making my life even harder to bear Ao should I let it all go? Or should I do something to change things While I know in my heart it will only backfire *If the only place I can live my dreams is in my sleep, then I'll sleep forever!* [This message has been edited by Heavens Tears (edited 04-11-2001).] |
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Marshalzu 
since 2001-02-15
Posts 2681Lurking |
Welcome to Passions. This was a great first post and I really enjoyed it. Andrew. " No Army can conquer a galaxy, yet faith alone can overturn the universe." |
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banburycross Senior Member
since 2001-03-27
Posts 946viginia |
Welcome to passions!! this is a great first post, and i really like your name. i look forward to reading lots more from you in the future. Sometimes, the things that go unsaid are the only things worth hearing. |
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LoveBug
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Member Elite
since 2000-01-08
Posts 4697 |
Welcome to Passions! This is a beautiful first piece, and you portray your emotions well. I look forward to seeing more of your work. Thanks for sharing.  PS-cbeck your e-mail "Men judge generally more by the eye than by the hand, for everyone can see and few can feel."-Machiavelli [This message has been edited by LoveBug (edited 04-10-2001).] |
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Dopey Dope
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Member Patricius
since 2000-08-30
Posts 11132San Juan, Puerto Rico |
I really liked this. Very well done!!!! Welcome to Passions!  I was born myself, raised myself, and will continue to be myself. The world will just have to adjust. |
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Allan Riverwood
since 2001-01-04
Posts 3502Winnipeg |
I think you should take the time to edit a few typoes... My critique would have to be that you used "complicating" in what appeared to be the wrong context, maybe change it to "complicated."  Other than that, I really enjoyed this poem. You seem to have a lot of potential, I look forward to reading and sharing poetry with you. Welcome to Passions in Poetry.   ~Allan The sun was born, so it shall die. ~VNV Nation, "Further" |
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Ina Senior Member
since 2000-10-09
Posts 1236Quebec, Canada |
this was great work. welcome to passions. Regina a small cut is only the beggining of a life in pain |
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Child of the Stars
since 2000-09-07
Posts 1658Ann Arbor, MI |
Welcome welcome welcome!! This was a good first post, keep writing and sharing! Seee ya! ~Carly NOTE TO SELF: Live to love and love to live. |
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Fading Away
since 2001-03-14
Posts 3131Lynchburg, Virginia |
Welcome to Passions! Very nice first post. I enjoyed the read.. Thanks for sharing, and I hope to see more soon. --Marie "Hope is a thing with feathers that perches in the soul." --Emily Dickinson |
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Acies
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Member Rara Avis
since 2000-06-07
Posts 7665Twilight Zone |
WELCOME TO PASSIONS!!! A beautiful first piece. What a way to start you sharing here in Passions. I'm glad you decided to join our family, and I do hope you enjoy "So long as men can breathe or eyes can see, |
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