End of the World - Our Rebirth

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fractal007
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since 2000-06-01

Posts 1958

0 posted 2001-04-10 04:29 AM

The final morning
Red sun climbs tiredly up
Mournful gazing down

The glowing shimmering figure
Appears before the girl, the queen.
The mobs approach, dark and unseen.
"Who is this monster bright?!?! An evil girl!!!"

   The figure shimmering
     "Remember well,"
         Fading,
             "Your destiny,"
                  Gone.

Final whisper
             "I have influence over all...."
                  Silence

"Catch the girl, catch the infidel!"
Trying to run away and home
Unable to escape, captured...
"Join us now, join or die!"

      "I'm your queen!"

"Confess before your government!"

      "I am your queen!"

Face of the inquisitor turns
To the face of the figure bright.
"I hate you, I trusted you!"

    The figure says nothing,
        Final strike of death.

"I hate you, I trusted you!"

    Final gurgling scream of anger.
Death

Inquisitor:  "She was the last link to lands of death"

    All cheer, all dance, all sing away the night!

   Mother has a new child,
   City of steal
   City of might
   Man to reel
   Of to the night.

        "I have influence over all...."

And so do you now
Your children await their birth
Our future our christ

"If history is to change, let it change. If the world is to be destroyed, so be it. If my fate is to die, I must simply laugh"

-- Magus

[This message has been edited by fractal007 (edited 04-10-2001).]

Allan Riverwood

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since 2001-01-04

Posts 3502
Winnipeg

1 posted 2001-04-10 08:41 AM

The series moves onward, Frac... as each chapter enters my library....

Another marvelous job. The senryus as headers and footers are cute.
~Allan

The sun was born, so it shall die. ~VNV Nation, "Further"

Allan Riverwood

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since 2001-01-04

Posts 3502
Winnipeg

2 posted 2001-04-10 08:42 AM

and now to hit the button

Allan Riverwood

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since 2001-01-04

Posts 3502
Winnipeg

3 posted 2001-04-10 08:42 AM

double post? My mistake.... sheesh, sorry man....

[This message has been edited by Allan Riverwood (edited 04-10-2001).]

Heavens Tears

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since 2001-03-15

Posts 677

4 posted 2001-04-10 09:08 AM

I like the style of this poem. Its good to use new techniques instead of using only one. I look forward to more!

*If the only place I can live my dreams is in my sleep, then I'll sleep forever!*

Dopey Dope

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Member Patricius

since 2000-08-30

Posts 11132
San Juan, Puerto Rico

5 posted 2001-04-10 11:09 AM

Wow wonderful poem. I really liked it as it approached the end. This was really well done.

I was born myself, raised myself, and will continue to be myself. The world will just have to adjust.

I'm in love with my shadow
I admire it daily

Ina
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since 2000-10-09

Posts 1236
Quebec, Canada

6 posted 2001-04-10 12:19 PM

this was so awesome! i thought this was so intersting. lively read full of power.
(thumbs up)
Regina

a small cut is only the beggining of a life in pain

Fading Away

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since 2001-03-14

Posts 3131
Lynchburg, Virginia

7 posted 2001-04-10 03:35 PM

I'm really enjoying this series. This poem especially interested me...
Very nice job. I like the format of the poem a lot.
Nicely done!

--Marie

"Hope is a thing with feathers that perches in the soul." --Emily Dickinson

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