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katherine
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since 2000-06-10

Posts 365
Canberra Australia

0 posted 2001-03-28 04:47 AM

ok i do know this is shocking, i really couldn't be bothered tonight with spelling and stuff. this is proberly worse then the poem before sorry! a lots going on i just had to get it all out some hoe with crying.

Let the sadness flow
let the misery rule
let my body go with the music
i don't know what else to do

i thought you were the only
thing that was right.....
i guess i was wrong.

I'm always wrong about people

i got that feeling agian like i
knew but i didn't
I know that feeling all too well.

i hate you so much it hurts
you couldn't want me back could you
no cause your a male.
who would want me i'm just me
nothing special did you see.

i can't run from this....

keoni
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since 2000-10-16

Posts 850
Up in the mountains in the NFC

1 posted 2001-03-28 10:43 AM

Very sad poem. Really emotion filled. But don't sell yourself short because of this. I didn't like the last few lines because you should not be feeling that way. Good luck and cheer up.
Jon

"Your anger is a gift"-Rage Against The Machine

Allan Riverwood

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since 2001-01-04

Posts 3502
Winnipeg

2 posted 2001-03-28 03:56 PM

I missed your poetry, Katiepoo. It's been a while since I read one!

You did a good job, is this the guy you told me about?  That's sad how you say these things about yourself... but I suppose it's just emotion on paper.  Try to think a bit better of yourself.
Remember what we talked about, Katiepoo... you rule.
Alright?  Keep this mentality in your time of need.

This poem was actually well put together. I think the last line was such a great way to end the poem, it completed the thought excellently.
~Allan

If I had your eyes, I'd be blind. For I can only see out of my own. ~~Carly Van Dort

LoveBug

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since 2000-01-08

Posts 4697

3 posted 2001-03-28 04:03 PM

This is such a sad poem about a really tough situation. Like Keoni said, though, you shouldn't let anyone make you feel like you aren't good enough. Thanks for sharing.

"Men judge generally more by the eye than by the hand, for everyone can see and few can feel."-Machiavelli

Fading Away

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since 2001-03-14

Posts 3131
Lynchburg, Virginia

4 posted 2001-03-28 04:29 PM

Oh this is sad. It sounds like you're going through a hard time... keep your head up. Great job on the poem. I hope to read more from you. Keep writing - it helps. Nicely done.

--Marie

I never thought that you would ever be the one to let me down. I guess that just goes to show how wrong I always am.

Dopey Dope

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Member Patricius

since 2000-08-30

Posts 11132
San Juan, Puerto Rico

5 posted 2001-04-01 12:40 PM

Quite sad here. I liked it though. Thought you did well.

I was born myself, raised myself, and will continue to be myself. The world will just have to adjust.

I'm in love with my shadow
I admire it daily

Poet on Acid
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since 2001-01-07

Posts 325
Florida, USA

6 posted 2001-04-01 12:45 PM

ouch, I tinks I gots the general idea of what happened. I'm sorry, pains of the heart tend to be the most severe. Things will get better in time though. The poem itself was great.

>¶ØÊ†<

xShUgArHiGhx

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since 2000-09-26

Posts 3150
tRyIn tO fIt iN2 mY oWn ShoEs

7 posted 2001-04-01 09:26 PM

This was a great poem!! If you dont think that guy deserves you then dont give in to him hun, your better off in the end. Good job!

Acies

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Member Rara Avis

since 2000-06-07

Posts 7665
Twilight Zone

8 posted 2001-04-09 10:36 PM

I am just loving your style of writing. it's totally diferent and it has it's own attitude. great poem.

"So long as men can breathe or eyes can see,
So long lives this, and this give life to thee." W.S.

Heavens Tears

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since 2001-03-15

Posts 677

9 posted 2001-04-10 09:44 AM

You express yourself really well in this poem. Even if it is just a poem...

*If the only place I can live my dreams is in my sleep, then I'll sleep forever!*

Marshalzu

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since 2001-02-15

Posts 2681
Lurking

10 posted 2001-04-10 09:50 AM

Very sad but you penned the emotions very well.
Andrew.

" No Army can conquer a galaxy, yet faith alone can overturn the universe."

Child of the Stars

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since 2000-09-07

Posts 1658
Ann Arbor, MI

11 posted 2001-04-10 03:15 PM

Hey girlio, get that head up! Stand up straight! Smile! I saiiid smile! Let's see some teeth! THERE! YOU ARE BEAUTIFUL! YOU ARE MARVELOUS! YOU ARE WONDERFUL! AND MOST IMPORTANTLY...YOU ARE LOVED!!!!!!!!!!!!

NOTE TO SELF: Live to love and love to live.

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