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Empty tears
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since 2001-03-12

Posts 64

0 posted 2001-04-09 08:26 PM

(I promise this is my last post today cuz i can only post 3 per day but stuff just came to me and it helps to release bottled up pain. I wont post this many again at 1 time.)

I need to cry
To release the pain
But when I cry
I cry in vain

For The tears may flow
when i am sad
But after i cry
I still feel bad

I may cry
For A million years
But It would only be
More empty tears

So why go on
crying this way?
Ill stop these empty tears
I begin today

Death is but an escape from loneliness

Fading Away

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since 2001-03-14

Posts 3131
Lynchburg, Virginia

1 posted 2001-04-09 08:47 PM

This is a very good post, Empty.
The flow was excellent..
Always remember to smile

and always keep writing. It helps.
Nicely done.

--Marie

Allan Riverwood

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since 2001-01-04

Posts 3502
Winnipeg

2 posted 2001-04-09 09:06 PM

Amen to that, Marie... writing really helps.

I did enjoy this poem, once more it brings attention to your username. Very interesting.

~Allan

The sun was born, so it shall die. ~VNV Nation, "Further"

Dopey Dope

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Member Patricius

since 2000-08-30

Posts 11132
San Juan, Puerto Rico

3 posted 2001-04-09 09:57 PM

This style kind of reminded me of the way I write....well...a style that *I* write in cept I use a lot of symbolism......ANYWAY, sorry....erm.......I thought this poem rocked. I really enjoyed this. One of my favs from you.

I was born myself, raised myself, and will continue to be myself. The world will just have to adjust.

I'm in love with my shadow
I admire it daily

Child of the Stars

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since 2000-09-07

Posts 1658
Ann Arbor, MI

4 posted 2001-04-10 06:52 AM

I really liked this, cept for the rhyme of "sad" and "bad"....but anyways. Very good poem, keep writing!!!

~Carly

NOTE TO SELF: Live to love and love to live.

Marshalzu

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since 2001-02-15

Posts 2681
Lurking

5 posted 2001-04-10 09:08 AM

I thought that this poem rocked and it is my favourite from your posts. Keep on posting.

" No Army can conquer a galaxy, yet faith alone can overturn the universe."

banburycross
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since 2001-03-27

Posts 946
viginia

6 posted 2001-04-10 10:07 AM

The flow is great and i really liked all the poems that you posted today. writing helps a lot and many times the best inspiration for beautiful writing emerges from those hard times. thank you for giving me a glimpse of your thoughts and your feelings, and email me if you ever need to talk.

Sometimes, the things that go unsaid are the only things worth hearing.

Acies

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Member Rara Avis

since 2000-06-07

Posts 7665
Twilight Zone

7 posted 2001-04-20 11:28 AM

Isn't it nicer just to look at the good things in life instead of the bad

I love the poem
keep sharing

"So long as men can breathe or eyes can see,
So long lives this, and this give life to thee." W.S.

knightlyshadows
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since 2001-04-14

Posts 791
obscured vision

8 posted 2001-04-20 11:59 AM

i liked this very much hun! *hugs* keep writin.

tiff

*looks to c if her signature thingie thing worked down there* *points*

knightlyshadows
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since 2001-04-14

Posts 791
obscured vision

9 posted 2001-04-20 12:02 PM

ok it didnt work

so wut is the signature thingie thing in ur profile ......and wut is the lil thingie thing that is like acire's "So long as men can breathe or eyes can see,
So long lives this, and this give life to thee." W.S. at the bottom of his posts and such???? im sorry lol im a nut *hides*

xShUgArHiGhx

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since 2000-09-26

Posts 3150
tRyIn tO fIt iN2 mY oWn ShoEs

10 posted 2001-04-22 11:19 AM

This was a very good poem!! It was nice and to the point. I liked it a lot

AngelPoet87
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since 2001-04-21

Posts 280
Indy

11 posted 2001-04-22 11:24 AM

Alot said in few words. Nice one.

~ali

2Good
+2Be
------
4Gotten

Bishop
Junior Member

since 2001-04-22

Posts 30
Nottingham, England

12 posted 2001-04-22 02:11 PM

A good poem. Short and stright to the point. carry on writing.

^*Bishop*^

*Evil has many faces, and I'm one of them*

~sugarpie313~
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since 2000-09-14

Posts 375
Maine, USA

13 posted 2001-04-22 02:20 PM

i love this! mainly because i can relate, everyone cries for one reason or another... i cry when i get laughing too hard! *L* but i love this... it's goin in my library! oh and to knightlyshadows, go to members area/help and you'll find a place where you can do a "signature"

Valerie

*Life can take your dreams and turn them upside down, Friends will talk about you when you're not around, but don't ever lose that light in your eyes*

sleepymoongirl
Member

since 2001-04-19

Posts 157
bc canada

14 posted 2001-04-22 03:03 PM

wow thats good. i write to release too... hey so we are only alowed to post so much? opps... i didn't know that... tis new here but i don't mind reading whatever u have to say

Silver Butterfly
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since 2001-03-13

Posts 42
Between here and the end

15 posted 2001-04-23 05:55 PM

Okay, here we go: I like this poem, but I think a few words could be omitted to help the flow along. Namely: the word 'for' in the first line of the second stanza, the word 'only' in the third stanza, I sugget in the fourth stanza the removal of the work empty, but if you need to use the phrase 'empty tears' again then you COULD get rid of the 'empty'. I really truely liked this poem. It shows growth and realization.

Ciao.

anonymous albert ?

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since 2001-03-23

Posts 2979

16 posted 2001-04-23 07:03 PM

very nice poem...
good job on this
keep writing

...?

death is not the greatest loss in life. the greatest loss is what dies inside us while we live. -norman cousins

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