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MindlessPoet
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0 posted 2001-04-20 10:31 PM


Im thinking I dont like myself
but then Im thinking "why?"
I then proceed with "why not?"
and in answering that one, I sigh.

When you think something is just within your reach
It seems to melt at your touch
I don't guess it was worth it anyway;
I didn't really want it... that much.

Still, life goes on;
I will prevail.
No one said they wanted it to..
but regardless the ship sets sail.

A nothing consumes my heart;
A nothing which only one thing can rid me of.
The answer is easy, or at least appears to be,
All I have to do is accept God's love.

Yes God, I'm here, and I long to follow You
although a solution to many problems, I find it hard to do.
I try, yet life overcomes me like a powerful spell
crawl back to God on bended knees?  Only time will tell.

*TiMMYBoY*
Yeah, that's me.  The Weird One.

© Copyright 2001 Tim Church - All Rights Reserved
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1 posted 2001-04-20 11:23 PM


Welcome welcome WELCOME! I enjoyed the first of your hopefully numerous poems immensely. I hope things get all peachy for ya! Struggles will cease.   Check your e-mail for something special!

  ~Carly

There is pleasure in poetic pains which only poets know......~Unknown

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2 posted 2001-04-20 11:29 PM


WELCOME TO PASSIONS!!!

Nice to see you join us here in Passions for Poetry.  Hope you enjoy reading and sharing as well.

Seems like your faith is headed the right direction.  He'll always be there for you  
thanks for the beautiful read.  keep sharing

"So long as men can breathe or eyes can see,
So long lives this, and this give life to thee."  W.S.

lonely*soul
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3 posted 2001-04-20 11:56 PM


always love to see new peeps joing passions..welcome!!!  that was a really good first read!!  keep writing..hope to see more of ur work
        *KiM*

" im surrounded by people, but yet im still all alone"

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4 posted 2001-04-21 12:21 PM


Welcome to Passions!

Fantastic first post!
I can't wait to read more..
Nicely done  

--Marie

subconsciously, i think i can eat so much to make my stomach hurt, instead of my heart.

Allan Riverwood
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5 posted 2001-04-21 12:28 PM


Good job on the poem, I would say to pay more attention to the length of your lines.  In several places the flow was affected by an uneven syllable count.     That's about it though.  The rest of it was great.
Welcome to Passions in Poetry.  
~Allan

Build a man a fire, and he's warm for a day.  Set a man on fire, and he'll be warm for the rest of his life.  
~Unknown

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6 posted 2001-04-21 12:31 PM


WELCOME TO PASSIONS!!
really great first post..keep writin  and it'll be great if u reply and keep postin also

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[This message has been edited by anonymous albert ? (edited 04-21-2001).]

MindlessPoet
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7 posted 2001-04-21 12:32 PM


thanks for the welcome    And the praise too, and I'm glad someone noticed something wrong with it, yay! lol I love advice, hehe

*TiMMYBoY*
Yeah, that's me.  The Weird One.

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8 posted 2001-04-21 01:42 AM


I enjoyed this poem greatly, especially the theme of it all. Very well done!
Welcome to Passions!

I was born myself, raised myself, and will continue to be myself. The world will just have to adjust.

I'm in love with my shadow
I admire it daily

cherish
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swimming in fairy floss...........
9 posted 2001-04-21 05:48 AM


welcome to passions!!!

dnace with me..
oh yeah i enjoyed your poem..!!!

"Life is not long and boring,
it's short and compelling." -Javier Agosto-

Angel Bee
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10 posted 2001-04-21 11:38 AM


I like this poem, it was good. Keep writing!
~ab~

*~Sometimes just holding hands is holding on to everything.~*

AngelPoet87
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11 posted 2001-04-21 12:23 PM


!!!!BRAVO!!!!

~ali

2Good
+2Be
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4Gotten

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12 posted 2001-04-21 05:48 PM


Welcome to Passions,
May this be first in many great works.
Good job.
<<<_Andrew_>>>

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13 posted 2001-04-21 05:57 PM


Hey,

         Now usualy I would start out with "Welcome to Passions" but this is a superb poem and has earned you an instant place in my library. I really enjoyed reading your superb work and I hope you continue to post here for a long long time. Until your next masterpeice

                              -- Linc

"Once you reach your original goal it seems that the journey was your real accomplishment."

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14 posted 2001-04-23 07:50 PM


Whoa!!! Well Welcome to Passions!! Im very impressed and very glad that a poet with such talent as yourself decided to join us here at passions!!! Im looking forward to what else you have to show!!!
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