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Selfish Starlight
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Selfish Starlight |
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Hand Me Down Junior Member
since 2001-04-08
Posts 32WV |
The night is cold As a thousand stars hang over my head Dancing in the night sky They've forgot the words we've said But I still remember The smile that's in your eyes I can't make myself forget Those bright blue skies Try to forget you But my heart just won't let go Affection's hard to come by And even harder to let go So I pray Selfish starlight, go away LORD please Take this from me The risk of love Is that she would walk away from me The cupids arrow Still gone deep inside my heart Some say that love Was only meant to set us free But i know better The starlight always finds me So I lay down lay down to sleep HE turns the page. Selfish starlight, go away. |
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LoveBug
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Member Elite
since 2000-01-08
Posts 4697 |
Oh boy, that was SOOOO great! Cupid's arrow does touch us all, and we all wish that we could make it go away sometimes. This is a great one, my friend. Keep posting!! PS:check your e-mail  "Men judge generally more by the eye than by the hand, for everyone can see and few can feel."-Machiavelli |
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Linc
since 2001-03-07
Posts 552The Backstreet Boy |
Welcome to Passions Great start keep it up hope to see more of your work. Until your ext poem -- Linc "Once you reach your original goal it seems that the journey was your real accomplishment." |
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Allan Riverwood
since 2001-01-04
Posts 3502Winnipeg |
Yeah, I'm with Lovebuggy. It happens, we all want the stupid nude arrow baby to back off a little at least once in a while.  I did enjoy the poem quite profoundly. The rhyme scheme was very creative and variable in places, I usually don't like that but it did suit this piece. I especially like how you had variation in stanza size, it once again made the poem a lot more creative in a sense.  Welcome to Passions in Poetry. Read, write, share, reply, and be merry. ~Allan The sun was born, so it shall die. ~VNV Nation, "Further" |
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Child of the Stars
since 2000-09-07
Posts 1658Ann Arbor, MI |
What do I think? I think you're cool!!!!  This was a magnificent poem. Just magnificent. Put a smile on yer face! Peace!~Carly NOTE TO SELF: Live to love and love to live. |
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Fading Away
since 2001-03-14
Posts 3131Lynchburg, Virginia |
Welcome to Passions! This is a great first post... I liked the style. Nice job! --Marie "Hope is a thing with feathers that perches in the soul." --Emily Dickinson |
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Dopey Dope
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Member Patricius
since 2000-08-30
Posts 11132San Juan, Puerto Rico |
Welcome to Passions! I thought you did quite well for your first post! I hope to see you reply and post frequently here. Enjoy!  I was born myself, raised myself, and will continue to be myself. The world will just have to adjust. |
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banburycross Senior Member
since 2001-03-27
Posts 946viginia |
Welcome to passions!! this is a great first post and i look forward to reading lots more of your writing. keep posting. Sometimes, the things that go unsaid are the only things worth hearing. |
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