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Dana Samples
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since 2001-04-07

Posts 68

0 posted 2001-04-08 09:55 AM

Hey guys this is actually for my english class and i wanted to see if it was okay to turn in. it is also the image that calms me down when i get upset. thanks guys. You Rock!!

"Cleansed Soul"

Standing on a roof top’s edge.
Staring at the fast past new world.
Raindrops fall on my face.
I stand; arms stretched out.
I am FREE!
Wanting to fly through the heavenly rain.
The rain that cleanses my soul tonight.

By: Dana Samples 4-7-01

LoveBug

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since 2000-01-08

Posts 4697

1 posted 2001-04-08 10:11 AM

Rain has that clensing effect on us all, I thounk. Very well done. I'd be proud to turn this in. I'm sure you'll get an A+! Thanks for sharing.

"Men judge generally more by the eye than by the hand, for everyone can see and few can feel."-Machiavelli

Allan Riverwood

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since 2001-01-04

Posts 3502
Winnipeg

2 posted 2001-04-08 10:57 AM

I think that, in the absence of a format, you did quite well on this. It's simple and to the point, and doesn't really need a rhyme or syllable scheme. Good job.

~Allan

The sun was born, so it shall die. ~VNV Nation, "Further"

Linc

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since 2001-03-07

Posts 552
The Backstreet Boy

3 posted 2001-04-08 11:02 AM

Hey,

This is a great poem I think you have a lot of talent and I encourage you to keep up the
good work. Until your next kick *cough* poem

-- Linc

[This message has been edited by Linc (edited 04-08-2001).]

Fading Away

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since 2001-03-14

Posts 3131
Lynchburg, Virginia

4 posted 2001-04-08 12:58 PM

Until your next kick? Alrighty then...

This was a good poem. I think it could have been a little longer, but that's just personal preference. Nice job, I can't wait to read more from you.

--Marie

"Hope is a thing with feathers that perches in the soul." --Emily Dickinson

Dopey Dope

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Member Patricius

since 2000-08-30

Posts 11132
San Juan, Puerto Rico

5 posted 2001-04-08 03:19 PM

Well done.......I liked this very much!

I was born myself, raised myself, and will continue to be myself. The world will just have to adjust.

I'm in love with my shadow
I admire it daily

Child of the Stars

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since 2000-09-07

Posts 1658
Ann Arbor, MI

6 posted 2001-04-08 04:42 PM

Yo dude! Dewitt will luv it.

Peace!
~Carly

NOTE TO SELF: Live to love and love to live.

banburycross
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since 2001-03-27

Posts 946
viginia

7 posted 2001-04-09 01:41 PM

YOu really presented a wonderful image in this piece and you did a lot in a very few words. great job and keep posting

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