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Empty tears Member
since 2001-03-12
Posts 64 |
They say he is crazy. Is he? Can it really be true? I allways said I hated him. Do I? Now that he's gone I'm not sure I do. They say "Look,she's fine with all this." Am I? Life's falling apart and im not sure i am. I said I could be fine without him. Can I? Now they've locked him up,and I dont know if I can. They say he can be fixed there. Can he? or is it just a crack-head,Crazy holding cell. They tell me "It'll be fine." Will it? now I'm not sure it will. They say he's my dad. Is he? I dont recognise the druggie in the room with the padded walls. They say he is crazy is he? Can it really be true? I allways said I hated him. Do I? Now that he's gone I'm not sure I do. |
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Low Man's Lyric Member
since 2001-04-03
Posts 236In a dream |
What a different poem, the way it was writen and the way I felt from reading it was very interesting. "It is better to have loved and lost then to have never loved at all" ~Unknown |
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Allan Riverwood
since 2001-01-04
Posts 3502Winnipeg |
Ah! The format of this is magnificent! Truly original, you deserve a lot of credit for this.  I think it's one of your best, it obviously had a heap of emotion packed into it, and it has great form and everything in contrast. This poem has it all!  Excellent job. ~Allan The sun was born, so it shall die. ~VNV Nation, "Further" |
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Dopey Dope
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Member Patricius
since 2000-08-30
Posts 11132San Juan, Puerto Rico |
Very nice done. This poem was quite sad and I'm sorry you're going through this. I liked the poem though and it was a very original format. Well done!  I was born myself, raised myself, and will continue to be myself. The world will just have to adjust. |
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Linc
since 2001-03-07
Posts 552The Backstreet Boy |
Hey, Great job, kinda sad  well until your next poem oh an thanx for the reply on my poem -- Linc "Once you reach your original goal it seems that the journey was your real accomplishment." |
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Fading Away
since 2001-03-14
Posts 3131Lynchburg, Virginia |
This format is very unique... I loved it. You expressed yourself so well. It's very well written. I hope this poem isn't a personal situation, but if it is, I'm sorry, and keep your head up. I hope things get better. Nice job on the poem. --Marie "Hope is a thing with feathers that perches in the soul." --Emily Dickinson |
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banburycross Senior Member
since 2001-03-27
Posts 946viginia |
I'm with everyone else in that the format was really awsome in this poem. a very powerful piece... good job and keep writing. Sometimes, the things that go unsaid are the only things worth hearing. |
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Silver Butterfly Junior Member
since 2001-03-13
Posts 42Between here and the end |
No constructive critisisms, so smile!!!! |
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anonymous albert ?
since 2001-03-23
Posts 2979 |
powerful.. nicely written great job   ...?death is not the greatest loss in life. the greatest loss is what dies inside us while we live. -norman cousins |
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anonymous albert ?
since 2001-03-23
Posts 2979 |
powerful.. nicely written great job ...?death is not the greatest loss in life. the greatest loss is what dies inside us while we live. -norman cousins |
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AngelPoet87 Member
since 2001-04-21
Posts 280Indy |
wow, i can really relate to this one so to me it is really really meaningful. thanks for writing something that could reach me, thats kind of hard to do, so bravo. great job! ~ali 2Good |
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Acies
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Member Rara Avis
since 2000-06-07
Posts 7665Twilight Zone |
This is truly a emotional read. You have shown your sentiments with such true feelings. Thanks for sharing "So long as men can breathe or eyes can see, |
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Kicking Kim Member
since 2001-04-16
Posts 426Cloud Cucko Land! |
Great poem this was very different to the usual things I see on here and ita always good to be different!! Very well done, keep up the good work! ^*~Kicking Kim~*^ "Theres no posession, just obsession and growing depression" |
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Heavens Tears
since 2001-03-15
Posts 677 |
I really liked this one. Just keep your head up, and you'll get through anything. *~*Amanda*~* |
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dramaqueen22086 Member
since 2001-05-05
Posts 50Hadlyme, CT |
that was really good, nice and storng, i like the way you asked the question, that puts it all together. keep up the good written,  ~!kellie!~ |
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stace_co2003 Member
since 2001-03-30
Posts 497In a dream world |
I like this poem alot. I especially love the format. it flows wonderfully and expresses exactly how you feel. Keep your chin up and keep on smiling! *hugs* Stace I'm just glad that now this rainstorm has ended, and I can see the rainbow once again. |
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xShUgArHiGhx
since 2000-09-26
Posts 3150tRyIn tO fIt iN2 mY oWn ShoEs |
very powerful...you did an excellent job getting your feelings out |
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Meggie1986 Junior Member
since 2001-05-22
Posts 41California |
This is a great poem. The feelings and emotions are beautiful. Thanks for a good read! *One meets his destiny often in the road he takes to avoid it. |
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