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My Cherubim
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My Cherubim |
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Child of the Stars
since 2000-09-07
Posts 1658Ann Arbor, MI 
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Caressing wings touch silken skin Hold me close, let love begin Epiphany of leading light Regard our laughter in the night Under melting sunset, flew Behind the rain, drink of sweet dew Inside my dream, outstretching limbs My world, my singing cherubim. |
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LoveBug
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Member Elite
since 2000-01-08
Posts 4697 |
This is a beautiful descriptive poem! You paint a beautiful image of love. Thanks for sharing. "Where there is great love there are always miracles" -Cather "Love heals everything, and love is all there is"- Zukav |
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jeremydraul Senior Member
since 2000-08-01
Posts 1118State of Despair |
very descriptive and imaginary! i loved the rhyming, it made it flow so smoothly great ideas created nice job ~JDR "Most people are other people. Their thoughts are someone else's opinions, their lives a mimicry, their passions a quotation." -Oscar Wilde |
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Allan Riverwood
since 2001-01-04
Posts 3502Winnipeg |
Very nicely written! Such a sweet message... and greatly communicative. Eternal life without the darkness isn't life at all- it is a lobotomy. |
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GirlsBestFriend Member
since 2000-12-27
Posts 71Planet Earth |
keep writing this lovely style! ~lotsa luv "Isn't it funny how to the world you are nothing? But then to one person..you're the world" |
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Morouxshi San Member
since 2000-10-11
Posts 207San Juan, Puerto Rico |
initial thought: what the hell is a cherubim? now i know. lovely poem. you know i like reading your poems. as they have mentioned the imagery was very good. keep it up *hug*< !signature--> San, the wise San, the dumb San, the guy... [This message has been edited by Morouxshi San (edited 01-11-2001).] |
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Kit McCallum
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Member Laureate
since 2000-04-30
Posts 14774Ontario, Canada |
Wonderful poem Child of the Stars ... what a beautiful flow this has, almost melodic, and the sentiments are just so lovely, nicely done!  Best wishes, /Kit [This message has been edited by Kit McCallum (edited 01-12-2001).] |
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Dopey Dope
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Member Patricius
since 2000-08-30
Posts 11132San Juan, Puerto Rico |
This was great carly. I liked this one a lot. very deep and good.  I was born myself, raised myself, and will continue to be myself. The world will just have to adjust. I'm in love with my shadow I admire it daily |
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Alwye
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Member Elite
since 1999-06-16
Posts 3850In the space between moments |
This is gorgeous work...I loved "Epiphany of leading light"---great line there. Truly excellent work, keep it up! *Krista Knutson* I'm a slow dying flower In a frost-killing hour The sweet turning sour and untouchable... -Natalie Merchant |
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Lakewalker Member Elite
since 2000-08-05
Posts 3289On the streets w/ people |
It's written very well, great job! "Disagreements stimulate thought, thought stimulates action, and action stimulates life." --Lakewalker http://www.thehungersite.com |
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Melster Member
since 2000-12-09
Posts 442Brisbane, Qld, Australia |
Great work... soo many people here have sucha great talent that it is great to see that it isn't going to waste... keep it up... Melz!! You can't hurt me anymore than I have hurt myself already... |
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Child of the Stars
since 2000-09-07
Posts 1658Ann Arbor, MI |
Hey everyone...Thank you so very much for your kind, wonderful words...they do so much for me...Much love for all of you... ~Carly inspiration of my art search for light out of the dark all the pictures in my heart lie awake there in my fog... |
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IsGona Senior Member
since 2000-07-14
Posts 723 |
oh!! I'm late  as is the trend for me lately Sorry I'm just super busy lately. This is dreamy... absolutely beautiful. + I learned a new word... Jason |
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Acies
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Member Rara Avis
since 2000-06-07
Posts 7665Twilight Zone |
Carly Carly Carly Your vocabulary at your age is unimaginable Once again I had to ask the help of Webster  you never seize to amaze me every poem is just awesome --- pardon my layman's vocabulary, but I can't seem to think of another word for awesome  I see no changes, wake up in the morning I ask myself, "Is life worth living or should I blast myself" TUPAC SHAKUR |
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