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July 8th 1982
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July 8th 1982 |
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Melster Member
since 2000-12-09
Posts 442Brisbane, Qld, Australia |
Ok now this is my very first attempt at one of these thingies, so tell me if I have gone wrong please guys... I think I have done it right, though it is pretty lame!! Today again we Celebrate the birth of me, Hip, Hip, hip horray... I don't know about this guys... melz!! You can't hurt me anymore than I have hurt myself already... |
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LoveBug
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Member Elite
since 2000-01-08
Posts 4697 |
This is a wonderful start! Some people (like me) are never really able to get these things to sound like real poetry, but it comes naturally to others. Everyone has their style, though!  Great job."Where there is great love there are always miracles" -Cather "Love heals everything, and love is all there is"- Zukav |
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Allan Riverwood
since 2001-01-04
Posts 3502Winnipeg |
Yeah, first time around we trick our way through Senryu. ("Hip, hip, hip, hooray") Want something fun to do, Mel? Try writing a Senryu with only one word for each line... I've done it once before, it actually turned out nicely. ~_^ Still, this was good for the first time. You followed all the rules, after all. Keep it up, Melster! -Allan Eternal life without the darkness isn't life at all- it is a lobotomy. |
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Dopey Dope
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Member Patricius
since 2000-08-30
Posts 11132San Juan, Puerto Rico |
I thought the last line was kinda funny. Nice crack at the challenge.  I was born myself, raised myself, and will continue to be myself. The world will just have to adjust. I'm in love with my shadow I admire it daily |
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jeremydraul Senior Member
since 2000-08-01
Posts 1118State of Despair |
pretty good for a first attempt ending was funny ~JDR "Most people are other people. Their thoughts are someone else's opinions, their lives a mimicry, their passions a quotation." -Oscar Wilde |
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Lakewalker Member Elite
since 2000-08-05
Posts 3289On the streets w/ people |
I like it  "Disagreements stimulate thought, thought stimulates action, and action stimulates life." --Lakewalker http://www.thehungersite.com |
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Melster Member
since 2000-12-09
Posts 442Brisbane, Qld, Australia |
Thanks guys... I will attempt your challenge Allan, I will see what I come up with and let you know when and if I come up with anything!!! Melz!! You can't hurt me anymore than I have hurt myself already... |
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kaile
since 2000-02-06
Posts 5146singapore |
i agree with LoveBug...everyone has their style and this read just fine to me... write on! |
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Melster Member
since 2000-12-09
Posts 442Brisbane, Qld, Australia |
Thanks Kaile... I am not sure about these though... I am still working on them!! You can't hurt me anymore than I have hurt myself already... |
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Elizabeth
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Member Ascendant
since 1999-06-07
Posts 6871Minnesota |
Yay!!!! Challenge well met! |
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Acies
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Member Rara Avis
since 2000-06-07
Posts 7665Twilight Zone |
Cheater!!! ha ha ha lol j/k  good job Mels I see no changes, wake up in the morning I ask myself, "Is life worth living or should I blast myself" TUPAC SHAKUR |
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