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princess^sarah Member
since 2001-01-12
Posts 131melbourne 
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Thinking "love" I reach for you You're slipping from my grasp I cannot hang on any longer I'll take you with me If you start trying To separate us in this thing Our cosmic love Please stop fighting You cannot leave, you cannot win If I go down, I'll take you with me Trust me dear, It's for the best Please choose fast I have no time for the frivolous things That rule your mind My obsessions run deep when I am near you And so you see, Either way, We'll be together Forever... for a guy i care for.. [This message has been edited by princess^sarah (edited 04-06-2001).] |
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banburycross Senior Member
since 2001-03-27
Posts 946viginia |
This is a nice tribute to chris and i'm sure he appeciates how much you care about him. Keep writing and posting. Sometimes, the things that go unsaid are the only things worth hearing. |
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Dopey Dope
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Member Patricius
since 2000-08-30
Posts 11132San Juan, Puerto Rico |
Actually this kinda freaked me out. This poem made it sound like you were obsessed with the guy. LIke possessive love, not caring love. I don't know the story behind this and I'm not trying to offend you, but if there's a decision to be made for your relationship, it should be done by the both of you together.  I was born myself, raised myself, and will continue to be myself. The world will just have to adjust. |
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anonymous albert ?
since 2001-03-23
Posts 2979 |
great job sarah! i liked it  ur the great poet. hehe lol..and no its not freaky dopey! but love doesn't always work the way u think it should as if one feels feelings towards another must one hide those feelings butjus 2 hope the other person feels the same.... |
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Fading Away
since 2001-03-14
Posts 3131Lynchburg, Virginia |
This is a great tribute. Very well written. Keep posting. --Marie It's true that we don't know what we've got until we lose it, but it's also true that we don't know what we've been missing until it arrives. |
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Acies
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Member Rara Avis
since 2000-06-07
Posts 7665Twilight Zone |
obsession is not a good thing you know maybe this is the reason why he's apart from you maybe you should play a little hard to get too "So long as men can breathe or eyes can see, |
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princess^sarah Member
since 2001-01-12
Posts 131melbourne |
it AINT obsession alright |
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Dopey Dope
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Member Patricius
since 2000-08-30
Posts 11132San Juan, Puerto Rico |
OK then. Just an observation with the way I interpreted your tone of writing within the poem. |
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princess^sarah Member
since 2001-01-12
Posts 131melbourne |
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