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the cold dare |
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lonely*soul Member
since 2001-04-05
Posts 396east haddam (moodus) ct :) |
No one wants me What shall I do How did I make the mistake Of falling for you Your charming smile Oh so bright Made me sleepless Everynight Thinking of you Brought emotions forward That cant be described By any known word. So many sleepless nights With you in my head I couldn’t get comforatable In my very own bed Now I look back On those sleepless nights Thinking of how I put up With our heartbreaking fights We knew each other vaguely But I loved you so dear And to think you did it For a cold hearted dare My heart broke in two And I let out a scream I wish it would go away And had been a horrible dream But the reality is I'll never be the same But the other truth was To you it’s a game. |
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cherish Senior Member
since 2001-03-25
Posts 1639swimming in fairy floss........... |
great poem...sad too....  ...hope things work out |
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anonymous albert ?
since 2001-03-23
Posts 2979 |
nice job and yea WELCOME TO PASSIONS hope u also will like it here.... |
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silvrduck Member
since 2000-11-05
Posts 146 |
Oh wow... if this really happened to you, I'm so sorry that's sad. Hope everything turns out great for you in the end..This is a great poem though, Welcome to Passions! I hope you continue to post more  *The hardest thing to do is watch the one you love, love somebody else.* |
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fozzyozzy Member
since 2001-03-15
Posts 336Lessburg Virginia |
so much loneliness in this place. We should hold a poet mixer! just kidding of course(wink wink). Good job. "The heart can think of no devotion |
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AngelShell Member
since 2000-03-01
Posts 446not heaven nor hell so... |
WELCOME, WELCOME, WELCOME. I hope you find Passions a worthwhile and enjoyable experience...*shoot me please* This was great. How heartbreaking. I hope for your sake you were writing from a purely fictional experience... Please come again... |
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banburycross Senior Member
since 2001-03-27
Posts 946viginia |
Welcome to passions!! this was a really sad poem but a very good one nonetheless. i hope to see a lot more of your work in the future. Sometimes, the things that go unsaid are the only things worth hearing. |
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Fading Away
since 2001-03-14
Posts 3131Lynchburg, Virginia |
 Welcome to Passions! This is a good poem to start things off. Nice job... I hope you stay here for awhile. Keep posting, I can't wait to read more from you. --Marie |
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Dopey Dope
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Member Patricius
since 2000-08-30
Posts 11132San Juan, Puerto Rico |
Welcome to Passions!! This poem was so sad. I'm sorry this happened to you. What a jerk! Geesh! Anyway, I liked this poem and thought you wrote it well. I hope to see you post more and reply just the same.  I was born myself, raised myself, and will continue to be myself. The world will just have to adjust. |
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Acies
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Member Rara Avis
since 2000-06-07
Posts 7665Twilight Zone |
WELCOME TO PASSIONS!!! Hope you enjoy Passions in Poetry as much as we all do. Happy reading and sharing. Enjoy  pls check you email "So long as men can breathe or eyes can see, |
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lonely*soul Member
since 2001-04-05
Posts 396east haddam (moodus) ct :) |
hey its me guys..thanx for making me feel welcome!! and yes this did happen, but its all good, i wrote that a while go b.c i was thinking of bad aspects of my life..newyas, keep reading my stuff, hopefully it will get better soon~~~!!! <3 kim |
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Acies
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Member Rara Avis
since 2000-06-07
Posts 7665Twilight Zone |
You're very welcome, and I hope you get to know some of the other members of the forum. They're great to talk to  "So long as men can breathe or eyes can see, |
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Low Man's Lyric Member
since 2001-04-03
Posts 236In a dream |
This is too sad to read, if I knew who he was I would give him a black eye to match his black heart. Give her two red roses, each with a note. The first note says "For the woman I love" and the second, "For my best friend." |
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Allan Riverwood
since 2001-01-04
Posts 3502Winnipeg |
I feel bad! I didn't hit her first post!  Well then.... a great big....... WELCOME..... to you. I must say this poem was fantastic. The only point of improvement is "dare" and "dear" as a rhyme. Because it's not really a rhyme at all, is it? Once again, forgive my tardiness! ~Allan Build a man a fire, and he's warm for a day. Set a man on fire, and he'll be warm for the rest of his life. |
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knightlyshadows Senior Member
since 2001-04-14
Posts 791obscured vision |
grrr *beats him up* the jerk!!! tsk tsk newayz....i liked it very much kim  keep up the good work hunNay! ~'*TifF*'~ |
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Child of the Stars
since 2000-09-07
Posts 1658Ann Arbor, MI |
Ohh I liked this! LOTS! Very nice first post here....WELCOME! Enjoy yerself. ~Carly There is pleasure in poetic pains which only poets know......~Unknown |
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Starr Member
since 2001-02-08
Posts 100 |
This was so sad. How could someone even do that to someone. I'm truly sorry for what happened to you and I'm happy that you're getting (or got) over it. Oh yeah.... WELCOME and enjoy your stay Every action of our lives touches some chord that will vibrate in eternity. |
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DancinQueen
since 2000-07-29
Posts 1092Kokomo,IN,USA |
 WELCOME! Awesome poem! I mean it, definetly in my library. Very sad, but it flowed so nicely and was jsut all together a very nice poem. Keep up the great work, I can't wait to read more! *dq -=We often get hurt when we trust someone we want them to be instead of who they really are=- |
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