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Silence of the Snowfall (my own addition to the explanation of user names) |
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Kosetsu Member
since 2001-03-10
Posts 450Alabama, USA |
At the winter sky, Saw the first of snow, And whispered a longing sigh. As that snow caressed My cheeks, I listened And heard not a sound, Watched, snow glistened. Silence of the snowfall, Peaceful rendition Of this endless bliss, This relaxing condition. A snowflake fell Into my open palm, Vanished, without a word, Leaving only chilled calm. I found my mind Vacant, void of stress, Serene silence, eyes Closed, weightless. Silence of the snowfall, Peaceful rendition Of this endless bliss, This relaxing condition. It can't be! He exists.. Master of the Oceans! It's.. Leviathan... [This message has been edited by Kosetsu (edited 04-01-2001).] |
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cherish Senior Member
since 2001-03-25
Posts 1639swimming in fairy floss........... |
hey..  great poem i liked it..it was so serene...peacefull...nice..!! one thing though....try changing the word watch in the last line of the second stanza to "watched"... Watch, snow glistened. okies???... |
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Kosetsu Member
since 2001-03-10
Posts 450Alabama, USA |
Good idea. it fits better with the tense. I changed it. It can't be! |
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Allan Riverwood
since 2001-01-04
Posts 3502Winnipeg |
Hmm...... yeah I did enjoy this one! Although I'm not sure what your name means still... forgive me if my oriental tongues aren't quite what they once were.  ~Allan The sun was born, so it shall die. ~VNV Nation, "Further" |
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Kosetsu Member
since 2001-03-10
Posts 450Alabama, USA |
Seijaku Kosetsu is my full Alias. It means Snowfall Silence in Japanese, but I've changed it to mean Silence of the Snowfall. It can't be! |
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banburycross Senior Member
since 2001-03-27
Posts 946viginia |
i liked how well you portrayed the feeling of calm and serenity in this poem. this was a very nice piece, thanks for sharing. Sometimes, the things that go unsaid are the only things worth hearing. |
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Elvenblood Member
since 2001-02-17
Posts 409Maine, USA |
LOL, well I might as well do a name bit! This is a really cool piecethough, I really ike it a lot! No angels in heaven nor demons below the sea, could ever dissever my soul from the soul of the beautiful Annabel Lee |
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Dopey Dope
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Member Patricius
since 2000-08-30
Posts 11132San Juan, Puerto Rico |
Nicely done. I found the poem itself to be quite serene....very nice.  I was born myself, raised myself, and will continue to be myself. The world will just have to adjust. |
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Acies
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Member Rara Avis
since 2000-06-07
Posts 7665Twilight Zone |
A most enjoyable read if I may say. I like your style in writing and hope to see more Thanks for sharing"So long as men can breathe or eyes can see, |
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knightlyshadows Senior Member
since 2001-04-14
Posts 791obscured vision |
Silence of the snowfall, Peaceful rendition i like your descripiton in this poem! very calming and quiet like a snow fall. what part of alabama are you in? im in north al. |
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Kosetsu Member
since 2001-03-10
Posts 450Alabama, USA |
Southeast Alabama, near Dothan |
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Low Man's Lyric Member
since 2001-04-03
Posts 236In a dream |
Hey great poem, I enjoyed this read. Isn't your signature from Final Fantasy 2? I had that game for my snes along time ago, that was one of the best rpgs to come out for the snes in my opinion. The best I would have to say is FF3. Give her two red roses, each with a note. The first note says "For the woman I love" and the second, "For my best friend." |
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Kosetsu Member
since 2001-03-10
Posts 450Alabama, USA |
Yup, its from FF2 (or FF4, as its called in Japan). I place the two at a tie. FF3 (ff6) had better graphics, but I liked FF4's characters better, and the world itself seemed cooler than FF6's, though FF6 had a slightly better storyline. It can't be! |
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Allan Riverwood
since 2001-01-04
Posts 3502Winnipeg |
Sweetness! *slaps Aaron a high-five* Another FF fan?  COOL!We need more of these! haha ~Allan Build a man a fire, and he's warm for a day. Set a man on fire, and he'll be warm for the rest of his life. |
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Allan Riverwood
since 2001-01-04
Posts 3502Winnipeg |
Oh! the FF debate! FFIX was the best. Everyone go play IX! |
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Kosetsu Member
since 2001-03-10
Posts 450Alabama, USA |
*hasn't played FFIX* I'm probably getting it this weekend, provided I don't spend it all on a gift for me new girlfriend. Guess love isn't all hell..heh.. |
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Low Man's Lyric Member
since 2001-04-03
Posts 236In a dream |
Yup im an old final fantasy fan. I played final fantasy for nes (I have FF1, FF2 and FF3 on my computer for the nes) but I havn't tried FF2 and FF3 for nes, I also have FF4, FF5 and FF6 for the snes on my computer. Im part way through FF5, I can't remember the last time I played that but I remember I am at a desert pyramid and the enemies were difficult and I had one less person on my team. I also like Chrono Trigger, I almost seen all the endings in that game. Give her two red roses, each with a note. The first note says "For the woman I love" and the second, "For my best friend." |
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Kosetsu Member
since 2001-03-10
Posts 450Alabama, USA |
I've played both FF2 and FF3 for the NES on my own emulator. They're both pretty good, but FF2 takes a little getting used to. It doesn't have the standard level up system, you know, with exp and levels. You gain stats as you use things that need that skill Example: choose fight, and your strength goes up. Take damage, and gain HP. Use MP, gain MP, etc. FF3 is awesome..the first game with the job system. |
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Starr Member
since 2001-02-08
Posts 100 |
This was done very nicely. The serenity in this poem was great! I enjoyed reading it. Every action of our lives touches some chord that will vibrate in eternity. |
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knightlyshadows Senior Member
since 2001-04-14
Posts 791obscured vision |
im from huntsville |
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sinfully_seductive Junior Member
since 2000-11-13
Posts 31 |
i just want to know what the heck all those number and letters mean. ie, ff1 ff2 and whatever. btw, i like your poem. twas ralazing and exuberating same-sex couples are like kama sutra - beautiful but misunderstood! |
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