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Ceinwyn Member Elite
since 2000-07-09
Posts 2175VA 
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Urgh this is no good but tell me what you think it's just free verse type of thing...I know I can always rework it eventually...so many thoughts but so little time:P Lastnight I found myself wandering Amongst the graveyard in my mind What brought me there, I have no clue Perhaps was it something to do with you? I felt no emotion nor any fear Only because I felt you so near You were there to guide me through the night And the only one to ease away any fright The only spirits I saw before me Lay beneath the mossy grass I came across an old tombstone Erroded with mud and weather beaten I read it outloud in my mind And then and there I felt my soul forever lost in time These words will forever be branded in my mind: My little child You have been forever lost in time But here lies what you have always been seeking to find Don't be afraid never bury your feelings The one who has brought you here will forever be by your side You shall always find it deep within his eyes And the angels will always forever be your guide... "Let me be the one you call, if you jump I'll break your fall, lift you up and fly away with you into the night" ~Crash and Burn~ |
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banburycross Senior Member
since 2001-03-27
Posts 946viginia |
This is a poem with a lot of interesting images in it. it gives the reader food for thought, which is always a good thing. Sometimes, the things that go unsaid are the only things worth hearing. |
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Dopey Dope
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Member Patricius
since 2000-08-30
Posts 11132San Juan, Puerto Rico |
I liked this one. Very well written and I thought it was great. Hope to see more  I was born myself, raised myself, and will continue to be myself. The world will just have to adjust. |
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Fading Away
since 2001-03-14
Posts 3131Lynchburg, Virginia |
Great imagery.. this is very well written. Good job. --Marie It's true that we don't know what we've got until we lose it, but it's also true that we don't know what we've been missing until it arrives. |
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Erin Member Elite
since 2000-06-15
Posts 2527~Chicago~ |
Ceinwyn~ Amazing! This is a great poem. You are one of the main people whos poetry I have missed while being away. And coming back and reading this work of art was just the thing to put a smile on my face. As I have told you before, you have an amazing way with the words. Keep up the great work girl! |
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Linc
since 2001-03-07
Posts 552The Backstreet Boy |
Hey, I wish I could say I liked it but I can't I am in a happy mood right now  but I can say I liked the format and it was well written. Until your next (hopfuly happier hehe) poem-- Linc "Once you reach your original goal it seems that the journey was your real accomplishment." |
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Acies
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Member Rara Avis
since 2000-06-07
Posts 7665Twilight Zone |
This is actually amazing. I love each word i read. You've gotten better and better. keep it up "So long as men can breathe or eyes can see, |
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