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princess^sarah
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since 2001-01-12

Posts 131
melbourne

0 posted 2001-04-04 12:50 PM

Our lips drew close, my body shook, I looked into your eyes.
I could feel your breath, we stopped just short, we jointly shared
sigh.
We pulled away, that game we play, our passion grew and grew.
You grinned your grin, it to my breath, my heart belonged to you.
Time just stopped, the world was gone, there was only you and me.
I touched your face, our lips caressed, our love was ow set free.
I pulled you close, you held me tight like no one had over done.
Our tongues made love, our hearts united, our souls became as one.
There were other whom my lips had touched my lips that never knew.
But, I'd never kissed before that day, I first a kiss with you.

banburycross
Senior Member

since 2001-03-27

Posts 946
viginia

1 posted 2001-04-04 09:26 AM

the rhythm and flow of this one was really, really good. this is by far my favorite poem that you've written. keep writing and getting better.

Sometimes, the things that go unsaid are the only things worth hearing.

Dopey Dope

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Member Patricius

since 2000-08-30

Posts 11132
San Juan, Puerto Rico

2 posted 2001-04-04 05:45 PM

Wowish.....very very nice. Your tongues made love.....wow that was a wonderful description. I really enjoyed this poem.

I was born myself, raised myself, and will continue to be myself. The world will just have to adjust.

I'm in love with my shadow
I admire it daily

Lakewalker
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since 2000-08-05

Posts 3289
On the streets w/ people

3 posted 2001-04-05 04:40 PM

The feeling this one has left in me is excellent, great job on the poem!

"Be kind, for everyone you meet is fighting a hard battle"
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Empty tears
Member

since 2001-03-12

Posts 64

4 posted 2001-04-05 10:35 PM

WOW! this one really got to me...im still in love w/ my 1st kiss,i guess its something that you just never forget. GREAT POEM!

Acies

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Member Rara Avis

since 2000-06-07

Posts 7665
Twilight Zone

5 posted 2001-04-19 06:36 PM

you've said it all. A kiss is just not a kiss. it does mean more

"So long as men can breathe or eyes can see,
So long lives this, and this give life to thee." W.S.

knightlyshadows
Senior Member

since 2001-04-14

Posts 791
obscured vision

6 posted 2001-04-19 07:01 PM

There were other whom my lips had touched my lips that never knew.
But, I'd never kissed before that day, I first a kiss with you.

*points* ^ that was very powerful i think! i loved it as a whole.....but that..that was just great! i like your style hun.
~tiff~

Allan Riverwood

Member Elite

since 2001-01-04

Posts 3502
Winnipeg

7 posted 2001-04-19 07:12 PM

Great job hon! One of your best, without a doubt!

~Allan

Build a man a fire, and he's warm for a day. Set a man on fire, and he'll be warm for the rest of his life.
~Unknown

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