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Ina Senior Member
since 2000-10-09
Posts 1236Quebec, Canada 
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hey there. how is everyone?good i hope. here's my 500th post. this one is different than my others. i need help with a title. Hold me close, hold me tight brush your sweet lips against my skin keep me safe and warm let's get away from this world close our eyes, drift away my body flushed with ectasy burning fire spreads into our bodies I feel the power of your body against mine Hapiness curls through my veins as our bodies lay entwined in slumer sweet dreams of love blur my mind soft fingers run their course along my neck soft electrical currents rush through my veins Whispered touches and chanted words fill the air with love and passion filling me with an unknown need pulling me into a hazy sky showering me with heat i feel your heart beat and sleep away my troules entwined with your body. Regina a small cut is only the beggining of a life in pain |
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Allan Riverwood
since 2001-01-04
Posts 3502Winnipeg |
   CONGRATULATIONS REGINA Wow..... 500?? Now you can come and check out the Sanctuary!  Hope to see you in there often, it's a great place to be with people from all over PIP! And it's one of the finer points of senior membership, in my opinion.The poem.... wow, you really outdid yourself for your 500th post. I'm curious, how long were you working on this for? I think it's absolutely perfect.... what a well-toned feel it gave me. Made me close my eyes for a minute and imagine the feeling... how wonderful that you can communicate love so powerfully in your poetry, and how jealous I am.  I think this is one of your best, obviously. And it's not even a gloomy one!  So library, here it comes... Oh and I'm getting into the E-card thing... I sent you something special in congratulations. So one last time, congrats to you! And a wonderful poem, Regina! ~Allan The sun was born, so it shall die. ~VNV Nation, "Further" |
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banburycross Senior Member
since 2001-03-27
Posts 946viginia |
I think allan said all there is to say. congratulations both for your 500th post and for creating such a beautiful poem, it is truly a masterpiece. as far as the title goes, i think it might be better as simply entwined or bodies entwined without the together but that's just me. i look forward to reading your future posts and i hope i get to see your 1,000th as well. Sometimes, the things that go unsaid are the only things worth hearing. |
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Dopey Dope
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Member Patricius
since 2000-08-30
Posts 11132San Juan, Puerto Rico |
Congrats on the 500!!! Well I liked this poem.....it seemed kind of between PG-13 and R hehe.....i liked it though, very sweet poem. I'm used to dark poems from you, but this was a pleasant change.  I was born myself, raised myself, and will continue to be myself. The world will just have to adjust. |
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Fading Away
since 2001-03-14
Posts 3131Lynchburg, Virginia |
Beautiful poem! Congrats on the number of posts you have. This poem is going straight into my library. Great job! --Marie It's true that we don't know what we've got until we lose it, but it's also true that we don't know what we've been missing until it arrives. |
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Acies
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Member Rara Avis
since 2000-06-07
Posts 7665Twilight Zone |
Perfect That's all I'm gonna say about it "So long as men can breathe or eyes can see, |
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Child of the Stars
since 2000-09-07
Posts 1658Ann Arbor, MI |
Whoa...yeah I'll ditto all that........ There is pleasure in poetic pains which only poets know......~Unknown |
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