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Anger Inside
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AngelShell Member
since 2000-03-01
Posts 446not heaven nor hell so... 
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Anger inside, a thousand suns, Burning forth like rain drops On a cold steel roof. Rising falling, To the beat of your own drum, Carelessly wasteful of emotions, Feelings. Blue blood high, My own red dull, Pierce my veins, Add in the die. To be like you, Or to be like me, A question that’s not But more of an answer, A realization, A dream, But not reality. |
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katherine Member
since 2000-06-10
Posts 365Canberra Australia |
This is awesome!! i really liked the last stanza (no idea how to spell that, maybe just pay attention in english once in a while). keep it up! ~katie~ |
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Allan Riverwood
since 2001-01-04
Posts 3502Winnipeg |
Very well done. You had a lot of great points and content to this. You put it together quite nicely. I'm impressed. ~Allan If I had your eyes, I'd be blind. For I can only see out of my own. ~~Carly Van Dort |
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Fading Away
since 2001-03-14
Posts 3131Lynchburg, Virginia |
Nicely done! I liked this a lot. It's very emotion-filled. Great job. --Marie I never thought that you would ever be the one to let me down. I guess that just goes to show how wrong I always am. |
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Dopey Dope
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Member Patricius
since 2000-08-30
Posts 11132San Juan, Puerto Rico |
Nicely done......you vented well.  I was born myself, raised myself, and will continue to be myself. The world will just have to adjust. |
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AngelShell Member
since 2000-03-01
Posts 446not heaven nor hell so... |
thanks, venting is what I do best, that and *****ing, but most of the time they're the same thing ;) |
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Dopey Dope
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Member Patricius
since 2000-08-30
Posts 11132San Juan, Puerto Rico |
I thgoutht his poem was one of your deeper ones and i truly enjoyed that. I think the title is a bit tricky though because it kinda takes away from the poem in my eyes. Keep it the same, but i felt it took a bit away from the deepness of the poem. Well not really, i just felt like it didn't fit I guess. Anyhow, I found the poem to be one of your better ones and I liked it a lot. I was born myself, raised myself, and will continue to be myself. The world will just have to adjust. |
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AngelShell Member
since 2000-03-01
Posts 446not heaven nor hell so... |
Thanks Dopey. It means a lot |
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Acies
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Member Rara Avis
since 2000-06-07
Posts 7665Twilight Zone |
Angel Angel Angel such short crisp lines I've more than impressed Never thought you were this good very enjoyable read indeed ~*standing ovation*~ "So long as men can breathe or eyes can see, |
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banburycross Senior Member
since 2001-03-27
Posts 946viginia |
This is one of my favorites from you, i really like this piece. the flow was good and the emotions, excellent. keep posting your work Sometimes, the things that go unsaid are the only things worth hearing. |
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vlraynes Member Rara Avis
since 2000-07-25
Posts 8229Somewhere... out there... |
AngelShell- Wow!!! Well done!  You've done a great job on this. I really like it. Keep it up. smiles, ~vicky "...until you have read the verse on his |
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anonymous albert ?
since 2001-03-23
Posts 2979 |
michelle it was really nicely written i truly enjoyed this write from you keep writing |
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