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Serious" limericks... (something I've been trying...)
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Serious" limericks... (something I've been trying...) |
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Allan Riverwood
since 2001-01-04
Posts 3502Winnipeg 
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(Limericks are fun... I wrote a few serious ones on impulse for EJ on MSN. She insisted I post them in here. Tell me what you think?) There once was a demon-clawed child who was born and grew up in the wild he wandered and killed as the holy blood spilled and left every footstep defiled [This message has been edited by Poet deVine (edited 03-27-2001).] |
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anonymousfemale Member Elite
since 2000-02-02
Posts 2797Limbo |
Allan, Wooo...  Now seriously, I've already told you that they are both really good. So I'll say it again with a little more enthusiasm. These are totally outstanding limericks. Particulary the religious one. I liked that one quite alot. Er..lost for words. Crappy head. Hoping to see lots more soon.  ~AF~ Death is delightful. Death is dawn, the waking from a weary night of fevers unto truth and light. |
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keoni Senior Member
since 2000-10-16
Posts 850Up in the mountains in the NFC |
Allan, These lymerics were awesome. I especially liked the religious one. Reall cool, you should post these more often. Jon "Your anger is a gift"-Rage Against The Machine |
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shortilove_03 Junior Member
since 2001-02-15
Posts 20Arkansas, United States |
Hey Allan, liked this one a whole lot. Take a bow buddy. But, I want to ask one question. Have you been watching those late night horror movies? j/k. I really loved those limericks.
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katherine Member
since 2000-06-10
Posts 365Canberra Australia |
this is really good kinda creepy but good ~katie~ |
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Fading Away
since 2001-03-14
Posts 3131Lynchburg, Virginia |
*CLAPS* *CHEERS* Very nicely done here, Allan! These lymericks are really well written... Another great job --Marie I never thought that you would ever be the one to let me down. I guess that just goes to show how wrong I always am. |
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Ina Senior Member
since 2000-10-09
Posts 1236Quebec, Canada |
great work! i love limericks there so kewl. im gonna put it my libary. regina a small cut is only the beggining of a life in pain |
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JBaker515
since 2001-02-28
Posts 458Dartmouth College |
I liked it alot, you are a nut though Good Job Once again. Your good old pal, Jeff |
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fractal007 Senior Member
since 2000-06-01
Posts 1958 |
Interesting. I liked it. I think you should try some more of these. BTW, your last line was 10 syllables long, not nine as it seems you intended to do with the poems longer lines. "If history is to change, let it change. If the world is to be destroyed, so be it. If my fate is to die, I must simply laugh" |
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Allan Riverwood
since 2001-01-04
Posts 3502Winnipeg |
"and left ev'ry footstep defil'd" read it like this, that's how I intended. Thanks for your replies everyone. ~Allan |
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Lakewalker Member Elite
since 2000-08-05
Posts 3289On the streets w/ people |
This one was good allan, keep writing them! |
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Dopey Dope
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Member Patricius
since 2000-08-30
Posts 11132San Juan, Puerto Rico |
This was great. I read this one a long time ago but couldn't reply. Well the one that stayed up was great. Nicely done.  I was born myself, raised myself, and will continue to be myself. The world will just have to adjust. |
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Kosetsu Member
since 2001-03-10
Posts 450Alabama, USA |
These rock. You know, these words could describe Gau from Final Fantasy 6. A child born and raised in the wild, destined to shed holy blood (well..Kefka believed he was a god...). Keep em up Allen. It can't be! |
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