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Sonnet IX - Emotions in Motion
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Sonnet IX - Emotions in Motion |
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jeremydraul Senior Member
since 2000-08-01
Posts 1118State of Despair 
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Sorry I havnt been around to reply to anything lately... Im surprised I had the time to write this...Ah the goods and bads of love! Enjoy. 'Sonnet IX - Emotions in Motion' The seasons a' change, as do my thoughts too For you they regard-- don't be too scared now Rainbow on you, yellow hair... eyes of blue Neglection never lived-- I don't disavow Love and hurt...transpire emotions abrupt I wish I wished upon your twinkled eye Riverly words need not flow to erupt Shake them off, show them a door of good-bye Walk and talk 'bout lovelier things-- like you Smells of flowers, an enchanting delight Your hair like the swayful clouds in eye's view Just nestling amongst your beautiful sight The knife called Love, showed it's truthful faces The soothe called Love, is bringing me places Jeremy D. Raulinaitis "War, what is it good for? Absolutely nothing!" - Edwin Starr [This message has been edited by jeremydraul (edited 03-24-2001).] |
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Elvenblood Member
since 2001-02-17
Posts 409Maine, USA |
This is great man. I love it! "Some men see things as they are and say why. |
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Fading Away
since 2001-03-14
Posts 3131Lynchburg, Virginia |
This is a great sonnet! I liked it a lot. Nicely done  --Marie I never thought that you would ever be the one to let me down. I guess that just goes to show how wrong I always am. |
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Lakewalker Member Elite
since 2000-08-05
Posts 3289On the streets w/ people |
.....don't you love US anymore  ? It's good to see you stopping in though, this was a good poem ...please post some more."Be kind, for everyone you meet is fighting a hard battle" "Life's short. If you don't look around once in a while you might miss it." BothUnknown [This message has been edited by Lakewalker (edited 03-24-2001).] |
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Allan Riverwood
since 2001-01-04
Posts 3502Winnipeg |
*whaps Lakewalker* He's a busy man! Have some respect! Good job on the poem, bro. You and I have to sit down some time and have a good long talk about Iambic Pentameter.  It's not as tough as it sounds...Hope to see you around. ~Allan If I had your eyes, I'd be blind. For I can only see out of my own. ~~Carly Van Dort |
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Lakewalker Member Elite
since 2000-08-05
Posts 3289On the streets w/ people |
*ouch* I know, I know, I read his intro, I just wanted to bug him. *cowering in fear* Don't hit me again allan, I take it back, ok? "Be kind, for everyone you meet is fighting a hard battle" |
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LoveBug
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since 2000-01-08
Posts 4697 |
"The knife called Love, showed it's truthful faces The soothe called Love, is bringing me places" Impressive work here! The imagery, the form, the flow, all perfect! I hope you don't get too busy, I couldn't go for long without reading your sonnets! Thanks for sharing.  "Men judge generally more by the eye than by the hand, for everyone can see and few can feel."-Machiavelli |
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AngelShell Member
since 2000-03-01
Posts 446not heaven nor hell so... |
I liked this. It was an interesting change from the sugar coated reality we so freely seem to find the need to express. Lack of Sugar. |
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anonymousfemale Member Elite
since 2000-02-02
Posts 2797Limbo |
Ah! He has returned for this brief visit! Well, I have been missing your sonnets. All that I have had is the ones in my library and I needed something new.  This is definitely one of your greater sonnets. You always execute them perfectly. Just look at the last two lines! Very nice, Jer. Hope to see more of these. ~AF~ In my end is my beginning. ~ Mary Stuart ~ [This message has been edited by anonymousfemale (edited 03-25-2001).] |
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Child of the Stars
since 2000-09-07
Posts 1658Ann Arbor, MI |
Allan's lyin. It's a billion times tougher than it sounds. HAHA! Well, jer, I've got to say, I truly missed yer talent. You'd betta stay cool, all right? K! It's a deal, then. PEACE! ~Carly "The eye sees a thing more clearly in dreams than the imagination awake." |
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Dopey Dope
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Member Patricius
since 2000-08-30
Posts 11132San Juan, Puerto Rico |
*throws a rock at Allan the Acorn man* Have no fear lake, javier is here!!! Hey jer, nicely done. Good to see you back *hugs*.....I'm not gay! I swear!  I was born myself, raised myself, and will continue to be myself. The world will just have to adjust. |
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Acies
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Member Rara Avis
since 2000-06-07
Posts 7665Twilight Zone |
This is really good JD I'm beginning to crave for your sonnets keep sharing "So long as men can breathe or eyes can see, |
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