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princess^sarah
Member

since 2001-01-12

Posts 131
melbourne

0 posted 2001-03-23 08:00 PM

That girl she is grey
But pretends to be black.
Pretending to be ruthless
Pretending to show no fear
To never back down
But i know she is grey.

Inside her,that darkness
Becomes pale,tortured and sad
She is vulnerable,alone
She tries to be black
She tries to be tough
But i can see past that.

She just needs to be loved.

Deranger
Member

since 2000-05-10

Posts 498
Somewhere, between here and there

1 posted 2001-03-24 03:39 AM

All hail love, opener of eyes and stabber of knifes...hehe.

Since nobody else has posted (They MUST have missed it...), you get to listen to me rant (Lucky you!)

I think its sad that people believe they must be false to themselves just to be accepted...well the real tragedy is that, in this terrible world, you often have too...

Anyway, nice work...kudos to you for trying to remove another's mask...

Spreading insanity, one post at a time

AngelShell
Member

since 2000-03-01

Posts 446
not heaven nor hell so...

2 posted 2001-03-24 06:43 AM

I like this. I really like this.
How many times have I seen someone at school pretending to be something they're not and whished for the words to express it. You beat me to it.

Once again, a great piece.

Perfection gained.

Allan Riverwood

Member Elite

since 2001-01-04

Posts 3502
Winnipeg

3 posted 2001-03-24 01:10 PM

Oh man, look at all the strangers replying...

I thought this was VERY well done, Sarah. Definitely one of your better ones, you have a great deal of talent and it shines in this piece.
Well done indeed!

~Allan

If I had your eyes, I'd be blind. For I can only see out of my own. ~~Carly Van Dort

Dopey Dope

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Member Patricius

since 2000-08-30

Posts 11132
San Juan, Puerto Rico

4 posted 2001-03-25 02:26 PM

When one doesn't have love he/she starts to decay. At least that is my experience. I hope all goes well!

I was born myself, raised myself, and will continue to be myself. The world will just have to adjust.

I'm in love with my shadow
I admire it daily

Acies

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Member Rara Avis

since 2000-06-07

Posts 7665
Twilight Zone

5 posted 2001-04-01 06:07 PM

I agree with Dopey
I think you did a pretty good job on this one
Could be better with a little changes
But all in all, I enjoyed the read
thanks

"So long as men can breathe or eyes can see,
So long lives this, and this give life to thee." W.S.

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