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Dark Enchantress
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since 1999-07-27

Posts 1258
meet Morgana

0 posted 2001-03-21 04:21 PM

Full to the brim
but nothing to show
Emptiness shines
where the sun's rays
gave up and faded away
Tried to fit it all in
when there was no filler
Just salt on a wound
made out of spite
Footprints washed away
I can't follow now
nor can I be followed
And here alone
I wake up seeing
an endless desert
with black and purple skies
The purple bubbles
and then explodes
Birthing fairies
to carry me away
But their golden dust
just burns my skin,
for all the darkness
of a half dead soul
So I can't ever
fly away

and in the end
we still pretend
the time we spend
not knowing when
we're finally free
and you could be
-NIN "The Wretched"

Angel of Darkness

Elvenblood
Member

since 2001-02-17

Posts 409
Maine, USA

1 posted 2001-03-21 05:02 PM

Wow, that's heavy...I don't have anything specific tos ay, just a good work over all.

"Some men see things as they are and say why.
I dream things that never were and say why not." ~RFK

Allan Riverwood

Member Elite

since 2001-01-04

Posts 3502
Winnipeg

2 posted 2001-03-21 05:28 PM

I love the imagery in this piece. Your technique is excellent, and the fact that you neglect to use format really shows how much raw talent you have.
As always, a very good piece.

~Allan

If I had your eyes, I'd be blind. For I can only see out of my own. ~~Carly Van Dort

Dopey Dope

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Member Patricius

since 2000-08-30

Posts 11132
San Juan, Puerto Rico

3 posted 2001-03-21 10:59 PM

Nicely done here! I liked the poem a great deal. Not as good as some of your others, but still a good read.

I was born myself, raised myself, and will continue to be myself. The world will just have to adjust.

I'm in love with my shadow
I admire it daily

Child of the Stars

Senior Member

since 2000-09-07

Posts 1658
Ann Arbor, MI

4 posted 2001-03-22 06:30 AM

You sound crazier than me. Dun werry, it's a compliment.

Tho seeing things no one else sees makes it hard to live..anyways! Very nice poem, as always...
~Carly

"The eye sees a thing more clearly in dreams than the imagination awake."
- Leonardo da Vinci

Allysa

Senior Member

since 1999-11-09

Posts 1952
In an upside-down garden

5 posted 2001-03-22 08:08 AM

I agreee with everyone else. And, for all you crazy people (like myself) we're not weird. We're normal, the rest of the world is weird.

I wish people would stop telling me that I can do anything I want to. I never thought that I couldn't.

Life is what happens when you're making ot

Fading Away

Member Elite

since 2001-03-14

Posts 3131
Lynchburg, Virginia

6 posted 2001-03-22 09:00 AM

Great imagery. I like this poem... very dark and heavy. Nicely done, thank you for the good read

--Marie

I never thought that you would ever be the one to let me down. I guess that just goes to show how wrong I always am.

anonymousfemale
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since 2000-02-02

Posts 2797
Limbo

7 posted 2001-03-22 10:07 AM

lol @ Allysa. Yeah that's right. You're all weird!!

I particulary like your title. 'I bleed nightmares' is just a great title to captivate an audience before the actual piece. I am really getting into your dark poetry.

"I wake up seeing
an endless desert
with black and purple skies"
Those lines sent my imagination into overload. Your writing is fantastic and you have earned a place in my library with your amazing talent.

~AF~

"It is not necessary to change. Survival is not mandatory."
-W. Edwards Deming

LoveBug

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Member Elite

since 2000-01-08

Posts 4697

8 posted 2001-03-22 05:48 PM

The imagery in this piece is just amazing! I love the way this one flows. Wonderful display of talent here! Thanks for sharing.

"Men judge generally more by the eye than by the hand, for everyone can see and few can feel."-Machiavelli

Acies

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Member Rara Avis

since 2000-06-07

Posts 7665
Twilight Zone

9 posted 2001-03-29 06:59 PM

you're an amazing writer
i've always though about you that way
and you proved me wrong

you're actually a great writer

"So long as men can breathe or eyes can see,
So long lives this, and this give life to thee." W.S.

emptyness
Member

since 2000-03-09

Posts 95
mobile,Ala,USA

10 posted 2001-03-29 08:19 PM

wow just wow this was so good i like the "darker" side of poetry and this was...just wow

"Cogito ergo sum"-I think, therefore I exist
"Optimi consiliarii mortui"-learn from the past
"Otia dant vitia"-the devil finds work for idle hands

banburycross
Senior Member

since 2001-03-27

Posts 946
viginia

11 posted 2001-03-30 10:27 AM

This is truly a wonderful piece, very well written. This one is going in my library.

Sometimes, the things that go unsaid are the only things worth hearing.

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