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StarPryncess17 Senior Member
since 2000-05-31
Posts 932Colorado |
purple skies bleeding giving birth to clouds of red walking rain, throwing insanity prozac dependant citizens spill forth pain coming in my direction quickly falling backwards hope gives life fear feeds reality breaking pillows busting at the seams as clinging flowers beg and the cynic falls... purple skies bleeding give birth to clouds of red tainting my heart forever... *this is a new form I tried today. I looked thorough all of my magazines and cut out random words and phrases that caught my eyes for one reason or another (I cut out at least 100) and put them in a bag. I mixed them up and took out about half, or close to. then I formed the words to make clauses that worked...i think the end product is quite interesting. there is a name for this form, but for the life of me i can't remember it. so if anyone knows what it is PLEASE remind me. i also would recommend this, it is very comforting and not to mention fun. i hope you all enjoyed....now why are you still reading my non-sense?? Tell me what you think!!  *"Tell me why you cry" |
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fozzyozzy Member
since 2001-03-15
Posts 336Lessburg Virginia |
Okay. This is good. I'm sure there is a hidden message here. I would say it is definitely about negative emotions and the opposites, and an incident left an impression upon your soul. How close am I? Or was this just supposed to be gibberish? Oh well good job nonetheless. I should try that method "The heart can think of no devotion |
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DancinQueen
since 2000-07-29
Posts 1092Kokomo,IN,USA |
wow Jess! Awesome poem here~i really like that form you used, although I have NO clue whatsoever as to what its called lol But i think I'll try it because I always find little phrases and stuff I cut out from magazines like that..so i'll try it too Great job!! *dq ¤Sometimes the hardest thing to get over, is something you never really had¤ |
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StarPryncess17 Senior Member
since 2000-05-31
Posts 932Colorado |
Well, I guess I took the most descriptive words that I could find, most of the time, your mind tend to attract to things that resemble some of your feelings. I guess these are what I was seeing when I looked around...and yes, you SHOULD try it sometime! Thanks a lot for replying. ~*~Jesilyn~*~"Tell me why you cry" |
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StarPryncess17 Senior Member
since 2000-05-31
Posts 932Colorado |
Kiley, you snuck in there when I was writing you little booger!! anyways, thanks for your input! It is so much fun to do this and I truly hope you'll try it. and if you do, post it so I can see it. once again, thanks for replyin hun...~*~Jesilyn~*~"Tell me why you cry" |
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Allan Riverwood
since 2001-01-04
Posts 3502Winnipeg |
COOL! I am trying this format! SOON. Great job on this one! ~Allan If I had your eyes, I'd be blind. For I can only see out of my own. ~~Carly Van Dort |
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Fading Away
since 2001-03-14
Posts 3131Lynchburg, Virginia |
"walking rain, throwing insanity" This is great! I'm curious to know the motivation behind it? Very well written. --Marie I never thought that you would ever be the one to let me down. I guess that just goes to show how wrong I always am. |
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Dopey Dope
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Member Patricius
since 2000-08-30
Posts 11132San Juan, Puerto Rico |
I read the poem and thought you wrote it off the top of your head. It actually made that much sense! When I read that you just pulled out the clauses from a bag and it came out like that I thought it was pretty amazing. My luck I'd pulled out random phrases and it'd end up like: Winter morning sheds a flake Cat droppings fall on my leg. Yes, I hate that lipstick fragrance! Mom made chocolate chip cookies, And the clouds cried murder! Haha Ok i just made that up, but that's most likely how it'd come out.  I was born myself, raised myself, and will continue to be myself. The world will just have to adjust. |
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Isabel Galaxia Senior Member
since 2000-06-18
Posts 733 |
Wow that was quite interesting. Nice job  . Um...if you get a chance...could you possibly email me....if you feel like it...? Things have been...well I could talk, lol.  Bel "And you're my obsession |
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LoveBug
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Member Elite
since 2000-01-08
Posts 4697 |
This is an interesting experiment, and the results are wonderful! I really love how this turned out. I hope to see more of these soon!  "Men judge generally more by the eye than by the hand, for everyone can see and few can feel."-Machiavelli |
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StarPryncess17 Senior Member
since 2000-05-31
Posts 932Colorado |
Hey guys thanks so much for replying. I LOVE this style, I did a few others, I might post 'em, oh and this is called a dada excercise, once again, thanks so much for your responses! Best wishes ~*~Jesilyn~*~"Tell me why you cry" |
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Acies
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Member Rara Avis
since 2000-06-07
Posts 7665Twilight Zone |
very intersting Jess i'm actually pretty impressed on how this poem came about at the same time, i'm impressed with the poem itself maybe i should try this one day "So long as men can breathe or eyes can see, |
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UNC STAR Member
since 2000-06-19
Posts 67Hinesville,Ga,USA |
Keep up the good work maybe you will start something. What ever happens so let it happen unlees you don't want it to happen. |
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Greeneyes617 Member
since 2000-11-22
Posts 329Arkansas |
Hey, wow, thats pretty cool. You gave me a good idea. Maybe it will help my writer's block. Thanks for the suggestion. I really like the poem too. *~*Malinda*~* |
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Erin Member Elite
since 2000-06-15
Posts 2527~Chicago~ |
Jessica~ Girl this is so unique and so intresting! Im glad that I got to read this. I seen that you replied to a poem not to long ago so I decided to look you up! Girl when you get a chance email me or IM me I havent talked to you in ages! Great work on your poem! "If you should die before me, ask if you could bring a friend." |
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anonymous albert ?
since 2001-03-23
Posts 2979 |
quite deep and powerful...i enjoyed this read a lot and hope to see more...keep writing...  ...?ahhhhh....i'm addicted to passions in poetry!!!!! |
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